Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Well this was a really nice little story that I uncovered here from a time a bit in the past...it definitely did not go quite where I was expecting it to go but then I did love the ending so...I'm definitely not complaining about that.
Anyway let's get right to it,
“I can’t believe you’re being like this,” he shoots me a glare. “After all this time.”
“I know. I don’t care anymore.” I don’t meet his gaze, my lips pursed.
“What’s wrong with you?!” He spits, eyes locked on me. “Why are you acting like this?”
Don’t say it. I urge myself. He doesn’t need to know. He’ll only hate me more.
I'm normally not the biggest fan of starting a story with a conversation, especially if its more generic...but umm...I think this falls in that rare category of starting conversations that might actually manage to get a reader's attention nice and early here.
“I don’t know,” I mumble instead, my head hanging down, desperately trying to avoid his face. Tiredness claws at my body, my arms limp and my eyes sore as a heaviness in my chest threatens to pull me down further.
“You can’t even look at me anymore,” I glimpse up at him to see him kneading his forehead as he says it, “You aren’t even trying anymore.”
Oh wow...really building up a heavy sense of hopelessness and just all around dread here...tension being built around this little scene here quite nicely so far.
“I just give up,” I swallow down the thickness in my throat, my tongue dry.
"Give up on what?" He scoffs.
"Everything." I say quietly.
“What..” his voice faints into the air. He sounds confused. “Wait, what do you mean?”
This is definitely starting to get increasingly worse...definitely building up more and more tension here as we go along.
I dare a glance and see his head tilted, staring at me through squinting eyes.
Oh crap. I didn't mean to say that.
“Hey?” Soft fingers clutch at my shoulders. "What do you mean, 'everything'?”
Okay...well here's a bit of a twist that I did not see coming...okay...
No. No. No. After all this time, I can’t cry. I can’t care. “I didn't mean anything by that. I'm fine.” My voice cracks but I push him away using all the energy I have left, turning my back to him.
“But you aren’t, are you?” Tenderness springs in his voice, prickles erupting all over my shivering skin. “That’s why you’re acting like this.”
Yup...this is definitely heading in a different direction from where it started...on the bright side it appears to be a more positive directions somewhat which is great.
“That’s not true!” I shout, trying to put every energy I have left into my tone but it seems more like I’m trying to convince myself.
“Oh but it is.” His voice falters. I feel warm arms wrap around me, like a blanket during a blizzard. “I’m so sorry I didn’t realize it sooner.”
I let out a long sigh and let myself loose. I slump my shoulders and close my eyes shut as tears crawl down my cheeks like a slow drizzle. “It’s not your fault. It’s all mine. All my fault.” I croak and collapse into his embrace.
Well this conversation turned out to be a lot more wholesome there and I am loving it so far...the emotions being captured throughout this thing are just...really well done so far.
He gently turns me around to face him before hugging me tight. “I’m here…I’m here.”
I let every wall come crumbling down, every emotion cascade through, everything I’ve tried to hide comes bleeding into my reality.
All the while I hear him whispering, “Please hold on for me. You’re going to be okay, I swear it. Hold on.”
Okay...well that was a nice ending although I guess there is a little bit of a deeper message here too and I think that's a really nice little message too.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall this was quite a nice story read. I especially love the whole message being conveyed here as well. It was a nice way to spend and afternoon. Aaand that's all I've gotta say for now.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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