Hello Ethan,
I was drawn to this poem because of the title I really love the juxtaposition between the idea of an apocalypse and also springtime, which traditionally is a time of growth and renewal. Rain too can be both healing and destructive so I really am a big fan of the title.
I think you have a really good thing going in the poem itself, though I feel like your point is somewhat obscured by a bit of forced poeticness. This poem reads quite a bit as if you are trying really hard to write something that "sounds like a poem." That's something everyone has to go through as they learn about poetry, and I have two main tips to help you in your journey to create more natural-sounding verse.
1. Read lot of poetry from lot of different people, especially published poets! Find some favorite poems and study them. Why do you like them? What does the poet do? Try to immitate them in your own writing (Poets do this all the time to practice!)
2. Use more concrete images. This can be nouns, but can also be verbs and adjectives! I love the image you have of "golden candlelight." That's something I can really see well with my sense of sight!
Unfortunately there are no senses triggered for me during the lines "When at last my heart is dying, / And my shattered soul takes flight" or the whole final stanza. I find thatmy favorite poems and poets use thick, rich images and sensory detail. I've been reading quite a few poems recently (purely by chance) that have talked about food in detail and I always find myself drooling over their rich descriptions of scent and taste and texture. It's as if I'm almost eating it myself. You don't have to write about food, but being able to transport the reader like that is something I think every poet wants to do! Try playing with more concrete details in your poetry.
Anyway, this was a lovely poem, and I did like your rhyme and rhythm, even though I think they might've gotten in your way a little bit. Try not to let your rhymes and rhythm dictate the direction of you poem, but they are nice tools to have and practice. And you're doing a great job
Hope this helps!
~fortis
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