Hi names 22Midnight
hope your doing well, let's get into it!
First Impression: So when reading the title I think I got the impression straight away that this was about someone who'd taught your daughter things that they shouldn't have, or maybe it was a father who'd taught his daughter very useful skills that she could use later on in her life, this on it's own I found was quite an intriguing thing to possibly read.
so normally I'd quote the text but this time I'll just try to do it with the image since there isn't any text to copy hope that's okay
I love how it starts out by describing the family like a picture frame but like a picture frame that has many imperfections, almost as though it's saying that although there are imperfections that's what makes it wonderful because there not supposed to be perfect.
Then it goes deeper and starts taking about i'm presuming that husband and wife's relationship that sounds like it's been strained over the years as times gone by. I do see though in the second line or paragraph where you say, and we'd sit on the couch as watch football, I feel as though the as should be an &/and instead either one of the types works I think the fancy version of and would look great with the current text you have here.
the next part is about how the mother dressed there daughter up as Tiana three times in a row which I think is adorable, but then it almost goes on to say that the fathers possibly chosen to forget that part of his daughters life for some reason, which if true that's incredibly sad.
Then it goes on to talk about how the daughter will look wonderful like her mother does when she goes older, such a beautiful meaning and a wonderful thing that may uplift your daughter and make her excited to be older, but then it's like the father just wants to preserve her innocents which I also can understand but it will come a day where his going to have to let her grow up.
The last to parts are sad and really diving in deep about the relationship that the father and mother had that's now faded into something completely different, and even though it's like the fathers trying to spare his daughter the pain of having to go through what his wife had to go through with him, his also not doing anything to change himself.
Overall: all together this had some incredibly strong meanings behind it and was a wonderful poem that definitely deserves more likes then it's already gotten, you do a wonderful job of bringing the emotions behind your writing into character so that when someone reads it they can feel that pain with you.
anyway that's it from me
hope you have a great dawn/dusk/midnight
See Ya
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