Young Writers Society

Hello there yes this is a review because you left me also a very nice review.

Thankyou for that It is my first try to write a review ,so it is a bit hard...


I like how you describe this website, because I love this website, but the world is very hard to me, so I don't understand the poem very good, it is a bit difficult for me to understand this one.

Also do I like this one: '' That we are just like this world. '' Because we must learn from the world and the world must learn from us.

''I can see it, where turning into be '' that is really a lovely line. I can very relate to this one.
Just how amazing is it if we become what we want to become

'' You can decide for yourself though, '' also a very beautiful and awesome use of words , yes we can decide ,we can always choose in Life because our whole Life is made of what WE do and can choose.

Also it was a very pleasant poem to read and also I like to end with that you are a very good Poet ,this work flows well.

Greets from; Meg.

Henlo. I actually just got done reading a poem you and your friend wrote! Really good by the way.
Anyways, I really like these lyrics. They are realistic and I actually would sing this at a talent show or something. I wont though because it isn't mine. I just wanna say that you have so much potential and skills that I wanna cry. Maybe sometime you could like, throw some skills in my face so I can attempt at stuff.

I love you, no homo, even though I dont know you.
Have a good day byeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

Hi Shikora here with a short review.

I really liked this song it was very good. I think you should make more and post them. You have a very good talent for writing songs. I only saw a few things in this work witch I would like to point out.

There is a sun set forming over the hills,

For were heading down a deep slop.

I am crying for the sad place that we are in right now.

"For were heading down a deep slope"
"We're"

"As the rain starts to fall hard in this place."
Perhaps, make it "over the place"

"Were so wrapped up in our silly lives,"
Again, "We're"

Beautiful poem... It has captivated my heart. I am influenced by your writing, EagleFly. I am in love with the things that you write... The style of writing is amazing. I love to read every word of everything that you write. Here, in this poem also, the emotions are expressed beautifully. The thoughts are great!

Keep writing... I don't have words to comment. I am, honestly, speechless.

Keep writing ...
Have a great day / night!
With love,
From Eros

I like this. I really like this. I'm a competitive singer and really into music so I always get excited when I read lyrics.

The raw emotion is so innocent. The realization is beautiful. The honesty is gripping. Just a few things here and there:

Your use of the word "raped," I think should be "wrapped". The way you spelled it is in regards to the sexual assault "rape". If you did mean that, then, the message of that line seems off. Also, "realise" is spelled "realized" but pronounced as "realise" is music. So, common mistake there.

You have the psychological aspect of a song written point-blank, here. This is actually is "trendy" as I've seen. Singers are writing songs in the aspect of "thinking" of, about, etc. "The Way I am" by Charlie Puth is calling out that he's the way he is and if you don't like it, find another guy. Selena Gomez and her "Back to You" is thinking of the past. With all songs, comes thoughts... But you wrote those thoughts as though you were thinking them right then and there in the "music video" so to speak. Not as challenging in literature but in songwriting it is. You killed it.

You wrote this so it can fit both slow, medium, and fast tempos. I can see this starting slow then getting a little upbeat. Compared to Gomez's "Back To You" lyrics (which I love the song), I like this better. It's original, yet can be found hidden within other lyrics.

Depending on how you wanted this to turn out--for a slow song, your lyrics are a little too wordy; for an upbeat tempo, perfect.

I like the imagery here. In literature, it is translated one way, in music, another way. I looked at it both ways and I liked the contrast between the two and I enjoyed reading it very much. Before I listen to a new song, I always read the lyrics and get the feel and I like the feel I'm getting from this

I can't fully critique this without the music because if I were to and get your whole mindset wrong, I'd ruin this beautiful piece.

Awesome job,
Louisiana