Young Writers Society

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

Anyway let's get right to it,

WE ARE READERS
We're known to sit in their room for hours, their noses deep in a book.

We can multitask like no body's buisness. Walk and read, not looking up, yet seeing everything.

Listen and read, you will ace that science test, even though you've been reading all semester, ignoring your teacher yet hearing everything.

We escape reality, living a different life in order to escape our own.

We prefer Peeta Mellark, Augustus Waters and other book characters over real people.

Most people won't understand. But those who do, whether it be all or some of this writing, accept that others have never lived another life, and they never will.

At two am, we don't need sleep, we need to carry on with our books.

We cringe when the characters cringe. And when they cry, we cry. When they anger, we anger.

You have families, but we have fandoms and various lives.

We are readers.

Hey CaitlinMarie!
Oh my gosh, this is beautiful! I love this, and I feel like I could relate to every single aspect of this short story. I was extremely interested in this story, as I was so familiar with the concept. The text was easy to understand, and you conveyed a wonderful message with simple, readable words. I pretending find myself having trouble with titles, but you summarized a central and simple idea and made it your title, sometimes I can't always do with ease.
In the very first line, though, I was stopped and confused by the contraction meaning 'we are' and 'their', illustrating two different perspectives in one sentence.
I loved how this was written, keep writing more like it!

Sincerely,
Saruka

So the first thing I noticed is you switching your person. You go from we to they and I think you should pick one or the other, not switch between the two.

Secondly, you wrote "when they anger, we anger" I would either use a different form of angry or change it to "when they are angry, we are angry", just a suggestion.

I can relate to this on so many levels, because I do prefer Augustus Waters to regular people a lot of the time. I do enjoy reading very much, and I enjoyed reading this very much. I am not the strongest in poetry, so I can't really tell you anything about the grammar or lines in this but I hope my suggestions are helpful to you.

Hey CaitlinMarie! DrLavender here to do a quick review for you! Before I begin, I have to say, I loved this. This is creativity at its finest! Alright, on to the review.

We're known to sit in their room for hours, their noses deep in a book.

Listen and read, you will ace that science test, even though you've been reading all semester, ignoring your teacher yet hearing everything.

We cringe when the characters cringe. And when they cry, we cry. When they anger, we anger.

You have families, but we have fandoms and various lives.

Oh gosh, this was beautiful. You describes us readers perfectly. Reading is an important part of our lives and personalities. Hence us being called readers and you really captured that here. Keep up the good work!

So sorry, but while I was editing, I forgot to delete some words that I no longer needed. For example, in the first row, I said their when I should have said our. Again, really sorry about all the mistakes.