Young Writers Society

Hello, I'm here with a short review for you on this lovely day, and I saw this was your first poem, so I new I had to come have a look.

Okay let's start with the review shall we?

Right so this poem, was really sweet and it gave me a flash back to my childhood. And it's really nice to no there is still poems like this so sweet, something that will make you read over it a million times.
I just adore the little story behind this poem, it just something I saw myself doing as a child.
I think your punctuation was spot on, everything was in the right place, giving this poem the best flow, making the read easy and enjoyable.
I think this would be a really good poem to read to a child before bed.
And I just love these types of poems. So I hope you will write more like it and post it on YWS soon. Have a great day or night.

your friend
FlamingPhoenix.
Reviewing with a fiery passion.

Hallo, I’m here with a short review! This poem is really pure and simple, which I like. I feel like this is some reminder that not everything is always deep, and this poem is lighthearted enough to make you smile~

I feel like you would write awesome children poems :3

Oh and the picture reminded me of spongebob for some reason XD

Annnnywayyysss~ That’ll be all from me


-Alice

This was cute and pretty lighthearted! Made me smile and I really enjoyed it.
The picture is pretty, too!

What is that? Over there? It's a review on the Horisun!

This poem was really good! I love the randomness, and I finished with a smile on my face. There wasn't to much I want to point out about this, because I feel this is one of those poems that are simply perfect the way they are.
Though, I don't know, maybe someone else will come along, and nitpick this to the core. Though really, I don't see anything that needs pointing out, great job!
As always, keep writing!