Happy review day, Alex!
Wow, what a great piece. I really loved the imagery and the overall message of this. It appealed to my dark and twisty yet still hopeful personality.
Just a few things...
"Your home the tinder."
Not too sure what exactly you're trying to say here. If a comma or dash is missing, it needs to be added in. Could just be a typo but it was a little unclear to me without the appropriate punctuation.
"Too the deepest red,"
Should be to*
"Like a priest to his bible.
You don't ever give up."
I would use a comma after the word bible, instead of creating a sentence fragment. There's some improvement that can be done with the punctuation in this piece, just to make it flow a little more smoothly.
Overall, powerful imagery and a solid message. I really love this poem.
Let me know via PM if you have anything else you would like to review!
Tata for now,
- Doc
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