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Mirror, Mirror

by AilahEvelynMae


Mirror, Mirror, on the wall,

who's the fairest of them all?

It wasn't me,

it was only you,

and an overwhelming amount of trust issues.

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Mother, Mother, dearest to me,

did you not understand that I wanted to be free?

I wished upon stars,

and flowers,

and birds in the sky,

but your cruel grasp still made me cry.

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Father, Father, the only one that I loved,

why then, did you fly far away like a dove?

I was trapped on my ship,

with only

me,

myself,

and I.

Longing for death,

but too afraid and too weak to die.

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Brother, Brother, you were nothing more than small,

how many more steps can you tumble, before you finally fall?

The wall you have built

looks strong and mighty,

but your tears fall faster than rain.

Oh, Brother, I see where you are hiding.

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Someday, Someday, I will fly far away from this place,

with beauty on my wings, captured by grace.

I will shatter the glass of your despicable mirror,

free at last, abandoning my fears.

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I will steal all the shining stars up above,

and find every flower,

perhaps my father's dove.

At last, there is laughter at every hour.

I have let my guard down,

and escaped from my tower.

-

As I befriend the birds in the sky,

finally,

it's just me,

myself,

and I.


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farq4d says...



ahh not a review, i just really loved reading this poem <3




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Hello, my friend!

Your poem, here, is so incredible, I can really feel the passion you can put into it. The repeating verses covering the self, mother, father, and brother very elegantly build a picture in mind, a sort of dark family portrait, then those beautiful verses of liberation build it into an inspiring and hopeful story, and finally, leads to a well-delivered ending of tranquility. Even with its grim undertones, it's a very heartfelt and touching narration.

The golden lines, what really hit the most, was this section right here:

"I will steal all the shining stars up above, and find every flower, perhaps my father's dove."

Amazing choice of words. Provokes so many emotions.

In more practical terms, the simplified rhyme pattern and structure help to give it that feeling of authenticity, and I couldn't spy any sort of errors -there's no recommendation I could make. I'm not a professional either way, but I would rate this 10/10.

Overall, brilliant work! :)




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starbean says...



your poetry is so beautiful and heartfelt, Ailah, I love this so much! you are an incredible writer and I love reading your poems. I don't know how you manage to make it rhyme but still be serious and heartfelt, that is a skill i wish i had!




AilahEvelynMae says...


Seriously, you don't understand how much this means to me. Comments like this are one of the reasons I love YWS so much and spend so much time here. Comments like this give me hope that I could actually be a writer and mean so much. Thank you <33 You made me cry!!




We are great at fearing the wrong things.
— Hank Green