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I am the Invisible

by AilahEvelynMae


I believe I experience the invisible
The unnoticeable and inconceivable
Which are miscellaneous in all things

I feel the locked doors
That I haven’t tried to open
Because I’ve seen others try and fail


I hear every drop of silence
While others hear talking
My lips are sealed shut in secrecy


I see the tragic endings
Of things that have not started
Shaking with fear I change direction

I taste no less than the extraordinary
Filled with hopeless fuel
My tongue is unstoppable


I smell every scent crafted
On maximum volume driving down the freeway
Away from the horrors of reality

And finally, I am invisible
Because I am a ghost that is unseen
By the senses of all life


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Mon Sep 20, 2021 11:08 pm
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vampricone6783 says...



What a lovely poem.It expresses the loneliness of not being noticed,yet,not knowing how to break it,because it’s so easy to live by routine.My favorite parts were these lines:”Because I am a ghost that is unseen.By the senses of all life.” This tells us that some people get unnoticed and this person is one of them.Great poem,I enjoyed it.I hope you have a good day.




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What a lovely poem.It expresses the loneliness of not being noticed,yet,not knowing how to break it,because it’s so easy to live by routine.My favorite parts were these lines:”Because I am a ghost that is unseen.By the senses of all life.” This tells us that some people get unnoticed and this person is one of them.Great poem,I enjoyed it.I hope you have a good day.




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Hello, Hikari here with a review let's get started shall we?

I love the emotion behind your work, I also like your title it fits well with your story.

{I feel the locked doors
That I haven’t tried to open
Because I’ve seen others try and fail}

Thats a very raw line filled with regret at things that could have been.

{I hear every drop of silence
While others hear talking
My lips are sealed shut in secrecy}

Hmm I feel this kind would flow better if it went { in secrecy my lips are Shut} but that's just my opinion

Anyways I enjoyed your poem, kudos! ❤





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