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New Me

by A SadGuy


I’m going to better myself

Better get the tombstone and the shovel

Dig my grave i’m on the double

Drop my other self in it

The old one the pretty bad one

The made people sad one

I don’t wanna be known as that someone

I wanna be known as the person that I will become

That someone

Don’t cry tears it’ll be okay

You’ll probably like the new me anyways

I won’t let myself go astray

So I won’t feel the need to stay away

Just to come back to do the same thing

I’m the one I’m always blaming and shaming

Continuously taming

And repairing well I’m breaking

I won’t shatter just to continuously batter myself

Over things that I think are my fault

I think I just need to halt

Take a step back maybe two or three

In order to better me

You may think how could he ever?

Well the answers probably never

But with that mindset how could I ever get better

That’ll just push me back and i’m not going down that path again

I will have to take a detour and if I don’t I won’t know for sure

If that’s possible but not doing so is just irresponsible

And I’m holding myself responsible

For all of my actions

This is a new me a new scene

To my life

My own movie

So you better yell action!!

New year a new me

Please don’t run

I’m a different someone

Not as bad as I was back then

I promise you I will do better

Will I hurt you?

I promise you I’ll never try to!

New year a new me

Please don’t run

I’m a different someone

Not as bad as I was back then

I promise you I will do better

Will I hurt you?

I promise you I’ll never try to!

I’ll never ever try to!

Are you ready to watch the ball drop?

Maybe I should just stop

My life will be a flop

And I’ll have no one to give props

But props to me for trying so hard

To guard those people that I care for

I know they always have an open door

And I need to do the same

This is not a game

I’m being a train wreck

I’m not trying hard enough not breaking my back

And that fear will only stack

Of loneliness coming back

I promise you I’m being real

I’m not being fake I better backtrack

and find what it is that I lacked

And gaining it not refraining it

Start training it instead of losing it

This is a new me and I’m choosing it

Taking the old me and I’m bruising it

I’m ending that

This should be a celebration

So throw your hats

New year a new me

Please don’t run

I’m a different someone

Not as bad as I was back then

I promise you I will do better

Will I hurt you?

I promise you I’ll never try to!

I’ll never ever try to!

I’ll never try to!

I’ll never try to!


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Sat Jun 05, 2021 2:20 am
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MayCupcake wrote a review...



Hi SadGuy!
Here's a review for you! I really liked your rap lyrics! There was a very nice flow and I loved your word choice;)

Dig my grave i’m on the double

Drop my other self in it

The old one the pretty bad one

The made people sad one


I really liked these lines that you opened with! I didn't expect for you to switch to talking about burying your past self. I thought that that was a very interesting turn of events. I also really liked the way "the pretty bad one" and "made people sad one" had a really good sound to it.

This should be a celebration

So throw your hats

New year a new me


I thought that the "throw your hats" was a nice touch ;) and I liked the way you incorporated the title!
Anyways, cool lyrics and keep on writing!




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Fri Jun 04, 2021 5:57 pm
PixieStix wrote a review...



Hi, Pix here to review this for you! :)

I love rap, so when I saw this lyrical piece I was just so tempted to read; and I'm definitely not dissapointed!

I personally love how personal you made this. I was silently rapping this in my head, it kind of sounded somewhat like Eminem (hehe) and I was bobbing my head as if there was music playing in the background. You rhymed everything in the perfect place, at the perfect time. I'd really like to hear this recorded.

I'd have to say my favorite lines were definitely:

And gaining it not refraining it

Start training it instead of losing it

This is a new me and I’m choosing it


Such a wonderful rhyming scheme here! *claps*

The only advice I really can give on this peice is to fix the formatting a little. Spacing out the paragraphs-- or stanzas--- or chorus, would make this a little bit easier to read.

Keep it up and i can't wait to read more of your work!

-Pix




A SadGuy says...


i'm glad you liked it! Also yeah I know the formatting is eh when I was publishing the work and putting it in I spaced it out with stanzas and put the chorus spaced out as well but when it got posted the formatting would just mess itself up for some reason and I didn't know why cause when I edit the work it's completely fine but than when it's posted it's just not. But anyways I'm glad you liked it this is actually the first time I post any of my lyrics anywhere so I really appreciate it.



PixieStix says...


Understandable, keep it up! This is great work :)




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