I'm not trying to be mean. It's a great story and all there is just a few things that caught my eye and I cant really stop seeing them.
1. They move too fast, honestly create some suspence like have them take time to figure out if they like or love each other.
2. There are a few Grammatical errors in your story like
"As i walked into school"
now even I do this because I type too fast and I mostly forget to use the shift button so as far as im concerned it wasnt on purpose
"I almostcried"
I do this all the time dont worry about it and just go back in and hit the space bar I didnt even notice till i read it for the second time.
"It was just that Amazing"
What was amazing? and the A should be lower case
Dont worry about these mistakes I do them all the time and I love the girl's name.....I never seen a One Direction FanFic with the name Chloe in it before so it's a refreshing change from Kylie and Cassandra
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