Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
My life was, well, pretty normal. I had a friend named Josh who was super nice and smart, I was on top of my class, and everything was kinda perfect for me. And I was only fifteen. I had enemies and best friends. The only grade I had ever received was an A+. I'm not saying I was popular or anything, (I wasn't,) but life was in my hands.
I didn't know about the gods and huge fallen stars. I didn't know what huge mess I would get into. And I had no idea how long it would take to sort it all out
Hmm, this seems to be a fairly standard sounding prologue here...which isn't necessarily a bad thing, but I feel like this one needs to have a touch more of a unique spin to it or it risks sounding a bit too similar to many other stories of a fairly similar style here...at any rate, let me dive a little bit more into this prologue that you've got here.
First of all, this is a bit different from most protagonists here. A lot of protagonists in stories of this style are going through some kind of problem or feeling like something is missing, but here, this person seems to be having a life that they're very happy with and it seems to be a very unusually normal life with barely any sort of bad thing...which is different, but I do hope that you do manage to convey a few flaws in this person, cause protagonists that are a bit too good aren't the most relatable which doesn't make for the best of stories.
The last part here is kept nice and vague, which I do somewhat cause it does add to the mystery, although with this it does seem a bit short here, you could probably very easily put this at the start of the first chapter rather than separating it off as a prologue like this one here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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