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Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Screams surrounded me as the army of bunnies charged toward us. Their razor sharp teeth flashed as they opened their mouths to bite chunks out of us. They're fluffy cotton ball tails turned into spikes that they used to impale us.
They just kept coming, brown and white and gray. Soon they all became blood red. These were called the Ravaged Bunnies. We saw thousands of them kill our comrades, so I swore that I would slaughter every last demon bunny. So, I tried to uphold my sworn duty.
I cut down bunny after bunny until there was enough blood to drown new York city. But they just kept coming, thousands after thousands of blood red bunnies.
I fought my hardest, but it was no use. Bullets bounced harmlessly off of they're fur, and only swords could kill them. The only problem with that was that you had to get close to them, and they usually stayed in groups of seven or eight. So basically, close range was suicidal, but there was no other option.
This was how the Rabbit Wars began...
Sooo....well as far as short stories go, this one is clearly intended to purely be for laughs here without any sort of actual plot, although I think you do manage to slip a decent amount of plot into it anyway. Its not exactly the sort of thing that everyone can laugh at cause despite the humor of the situation that you've managed to establish here, it is actually some pretty dark imagery that's being brought to light once you look a little deeper and see images like blood drowning an entire city soo..this is a bit of an acquired taste as far as the humor is concerned.
The main thing that works is of course imagining that we've got this creature that's usually considered friendly and cute being twisted into this demonic creature out to kill them all. There's really no proper setting whatsoever to imagine the situation, and I think maybe you could work on that somewhat just to ground this craziness in a solid anchor of sorts cause otherwise it does get a little too difficult to imagine what is happening here.
Overall, this makes for a fun read here, although I think there is a bit of room for improvement here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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