Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Women cried with their children hanging onto their clothes, over the dead bodies of their husbands and partners. The scene was awful- as bloody and as filthy as a slaughter house; it was horrible to see the way some men's heads rolled away from their bodies and gruesome to see the inner body parts of the other men falling out with fesh, warm blood oozing from their mouths.
The soldiers- or more like blood thirsty revenge-seekers- had left their wild mark: death. Its stench lingered in the once pure air and the buildings were stained with that dreaded red liquid. On the walls surrounding the castle were written the words: We will get it back.
Well, that is one of the most powerfully gruesome images I've ever seen at the start of a prologue, phew, never expected to run into one of these things at the very start, but well, this undoubtedly manages to get the attention of anyone that reads it here. Right away you know that the people being mentioned here are very much in a situation where they have to face an enemy that has no respect whatsoever for the value of their lives. All in all, the sheer horror brought out here makes for a powerful start.
The people of Kalimina lived in fear of what was going to happen to them next. They had been traumatized by horrifying sights and lived in constant mourning for their lost loved ones. For many years, terror had not reigned over them. They had lived in peace for almost a century after the last great battle. They had never suspected for such a thing to happen again so were living their simple and modest lives normally- not seeing that it was coming to them again.
Hmm, well the mentions of the horror of the situation continues I see...we've got these people that seem to have lived a relatively peaceful life for sometime in the wake of what may have been an equally horrifying war and now they don't even know what to expect probably because no one alive in that generation would've been present to experience the horrors of whatever war came before this.
The legend said that the people of Lugernham had been searching for something- an ever so valuable thing to them for many, many years but still had not been able to find it because it belonged to the peaceful kingdom Kalimina. It also said that only the royal families of the two kingdoms knew what it was and that it lay secret and valuable to their eyes. The king and queen of Kalimina, though, had greater worries than whether or not the Lugernhamers found this precious hidden secret. There was something much more valuable to their eyes and hearts: their only daughter, aged only four months old.
She was 'gifted', they said. With her smile she could enlighten hearts and was said to have special powers lost in the family for many generations. Opalite her name was, as her unique beauty resembled that of the precious stone. Opal.
Ooooh, I was not expecting an ending like this one to be where this prologue ended, but I think this suits it perfectly. The whole cause of this potential war is brought out as being a almost rumor like mystical situation there...which is one great hook, then we have a daughter that appears to possess a long lost power of some sorts, and well, this stuff all combines to make for quite the ending, I'd say that this piece on the whole manages to be very effective when it comes to getting our attention as readers here. You've done quite a good job of things here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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