Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
I've noticed several recurring themes in the books and movies of teenagers in our present century; for one, they're all basically the same. You know exactly what’s going to happen, and yet you read the same book only with different characters over and over again. Like all of these vampire books that are filling the shelves in book stores, or like the books Meg Cabot writes. Not that there's anything wrong with them, it's just that it seems we think that the more we read something, the more likely it will happen to us; that's why the guy always likes the girl back-that kind of stuff makes us feel good. There's a sense of security that maybe there's actually hope for us in high school.
OKay...for a second I had to double check there to make sure this wasn't some kind of piece by analyzing other stories with teenagers in it...but hmm, so this does appear to be a prologue for a story, so let's see where this is going here. As far as starts go, this is a pretty decent observation to make. It definitely seems accurate to me anyway...aand it does catch your attention as to why someone would be thinking about this.
Another thing; no books or movies are ever written about fourteen year olds. Sure, when we’re eleven and twelve we read books about eleven and twelve year olds, but when we get to thirteen and fourteen we read books about fifteen, sixteen, seventeen year olds. It’s like they missed an entire two years of our lives. Is it because nothing interesting actually happens in those two years, or have authors just forgotten that they exist?
Well I’m here today to change one of those things. Ellie Denham, fourteen-year-old girl of Ballarat Grammar School, pleased to make your acquaintance. Admittedly, I will be turning fifteen during the course of this story but that’s because a fourteen-year-old’s life is incredibly boring. Well, mine is.
Okay...so I'm guessing the character here is very much supposed to be aware of the fact that they are in a story...either that or its them writing this story...its a little tougher to say. At any rate, that's not a terrible way to pitch a story here, you point out a spot with not many stories written about and then claim to fill it in...although the declaration that this could be painfully boring does not give one too much hope.
In this book you will uncover the truly horrible secrets of what some would call my life as a fourteen-year-old, but what I call the One Year Social Experiment of a Teenager. Well, that’s what I’m calling this diary anyway. But there’s nothing really experimental about my life. I’ve never been one for science.
So just sit back and relax as I tell you the gruesomely boring and detailed (but not too much as I don’t want to scare you) version of the story. My story. (If this was a movie there would be some cool song as the camera flies quickly but smoothly around the school, but as this is a book I’m hoping you have the decency and imagination to do that yourself.)
The repeated mentions of how boring this is going to be is not a great way to start a prologue, I will say that. You might want to look at avoiding that. Its one thing to be a little humble and say something like "you might not find my life all that interesting" but this suggests that there really nothing of worth happening in the book and that can function like an anti prologue where this seems to suggest its a bad idea to read on, cause not many people will want to read a boring day to day diary of a regular fourteen year old...unless there's something to make it an interesting story, you wouldn't even be writing after all...so think about that one a little...the start is fun, but this ending is a touch...problematic.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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