Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Delicate crystals of frost embraced the bottom of the window. The warm rain ran over them, turning them into puddles of water. As the drops slid down they left streaks of smaller drops behind them, leaving it to be collected by another.
You could say that the rain and the frost are just like life. You could say that the rain is the tears from so many. You could say that people who think this are crazy. But who knows? Maybe I am.
Hmm, this is a pretty interesting piece here, although I do feel it is a little too short. I'm not saying prologue can't be this short, I've seen shorter prologues that get across a pretty strong point regardless, but this one doesn't necessarily do as much or rather it doesn't do enough here for it to stand on its own as a prologue, I feel like you need to add on a little bit more here if you want it to walk as a prologue.
The message does catch your attention. A description of rain is usually not the most interesting thing in the world, but you've brought a bit more life to that idea and you manage to make things sound like they are a bit more than what they immediately appear as, which does in fact make for quite a intriguing bit, the thoughts that follow immediately after certainly nail that idea home and does make you take notice as a reader, however, it just sort of seems like you need to have a teensy bit more context here than what is essentially a bit of a rhetorical question, because while there is the start of something interesting, that is all there is, there doesn't necessarily seem to be a reason for us to want to read this story per see to find things out, so I think perhaps you could look into that a bit, but what you have here does sound pretty interesting.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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