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Hello!
This...this is a work of art. A simple, bland poem where one is left with almost nothing to review on, but those three lines.
They say so little but they say so much.
The humor in this poem is subtle, but sweet. Waiting for laundry can seem to be a daunting action, which is not mentioned in this poem.
That's the great thing about short poems; they have so much mystery that they make you think. They make you think about the structure or the motive. It may mean nothing, or it may mean something huge, but it all depends on the reader's perspective.
Wonderful poem, one of the best short poems I've seen.

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Salutations, curious mind!

Happy RevMo! Gengar here to leave a review!

Hello… it’s me. Again

General Impression:

Another short & sweet poem! Is it a haiku? Sorry, I’m not good at identifying these kinds of things 😅

What I Liked:

It’s good at portraying a story in such a small amount of words. We can feel the emotion of the speaker even though they only insert their thoughts in the last line.

Areas of Improvement:

I feel ir could use punctuation, like commas after the first two lines and a period on the last (uhh I’m not sure if this kind of poem does not have punctuation)

I hope my review could be helpful. I wish you a good day/night!
—GengarIsBestBoy

The Messenger here to review for you Snoink! Happy Review Day!!!
Hehehehehe. That was funny. Sounds like stories I've heard, and siblings I have with such problems. Very funny haiku which I am starting to read more and really starting to enjoy and appreciate. You got the syllable count correct *thumbs up* and I see from to others that this is a very true haiku.
Keep it up!

I am just getting into senryu or haikus I can't very well tell the difference so sorry for that. This actually made me laugh harder than I feel I should have. I felt that it was lacking but what it lacked you made up for in humour.

White shirt is dirty
Black pants don't fit anymore
I wait for laundry

HAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHHA
MASTERPIECE!
x

Wow Snoink haha It was great =P

i realy loved it

It's perfect in every way possible!

Nice work












hehe

Hahaha, actually, it's a senryu, which is a humorous haiku! Or something like that.

Also, this is a pretty old poem! I'm going to lock it so that more people can critique to poems that actually need critiquing! But thanks for responding.

Absolute win!
It's nice to see a poem that isn't cliched.
And it's a haiku!

Just Win!

What's a senryu? O.o

Edit: Darn, sorry for replying to this. I know I didn't bump it but I forgot to check the dates.

Haha, I completely forgot about this poem.

It's actually a senryu.

Haha, awesome Snoink. This is a haiku, yes? I thought it was pretty awesome, and I laughed a little at the end. My only problem is that the lines seem a bit too forced. For instance, do we really say, "I wait for laundry"? No, we say, "I wait for the laundry." I can understand that this is a haiku and you're limited on the syllables that you can use, but don't be afraid to go digging around for a line that fits the requirement while not sounding awkward to reader.

-Elinor

Ya know, that's what happens to me! I hate it when the happens...another hour of waiting..errgh
~Skyy.

These poems are really turning out to be SOMETHING!!! My friend caught me in school yesterday reciting to my mind this one about your laundry.

YAY!!! I loves it!

*applauds*
Truly charming stuff, Snoinkers.

Exactly! I got this poem stuck in my head after a nightmare, in which I had to do Mozart's Adagio in his famous clarinet concerto. *shivers* And I had no suitable clothes!

*nods* So runs the life of a band geek... lol. Nice.

Spectacular!