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Alien Reflection

by Natyr Lucio


Great rainbow-flowed fields
Turn away from me
And I wonder why as I defy gravity

And, hovering three feet off the ground
I will watch an era pass
And I will weep over
Tears I have not shed
Lose sleep over
Stresses of lying in bed

And, ultimately detached from force
I will curse the gods for this gift
That which removes me from
Temporal damage and
Orbital vibrations

Perhaps, then, my fate shall be damned
Then I can laugh because She has overlooked me
And I can sigh and say
“I have had my fun
Hello, tears.”
After all
The observer’s life is one of tears

Is he not the historian?
The lonely viewer at the
Back of the cinema
Understanding the tear-jerker best of all?

Because he is the substance of solitude
And he is the emotion
Where it is absent
And therefore absent thereof

And, hovering three-hundred feet off the ground
Still rising,
I will reflect
And I will cause chaotic ripples
Among stars
Wondering aloud what it all signifies.


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Thu Dec 15, 2005 6:12 pm
Caligula's Launderette wrote a review...



This I think deserves a proper crit, so I'll have that to you at latest by Sunday/Monday depending on time difference for I'll be in France.

At first look, I really like the first two stanzas and the last, but the line breaks seem off.

tata hon,
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Wed Dec 14, 2005 2:26 pm
Mon Ange says...



Always the great writer you are. I'm envious. Though some of this poem confused me a tad, I thoroughly enjoyed it :).




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Wed Dec 14, 2005 4:50 am
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very descriptive, but it confuzed me, it sounded sort of like a wierd dream, sorta like my dreams...... could you explalin it for me i am just blown away... :?




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Tue Dec 06, 2005 9:42 pm
timjim77 says...



very nice. Watch colloquialisms like "tear-jerker" and "have my fun".





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