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A Temporary Interruption of Service: Commentary on 9/11

by Brian


It's interesting as a thought provoking piece. Yet, I have to challenge it. Maybe where you live 9/11 was just a temporary interruption, but not up here around DC. Sure, people did get back into their usual routines very quickly, but there's an all impending sense of doom behind it all. Everyone takes extra precautions now; schools frequently have "blue code" drills in case of a terrorist attack, most homes have supplies in case of a major terrorist attack, and it's no longer unusual to see a cop carring an AK-47 up here. I'm sure the country as a whole did move on and resign it to memory, but that's not true for the places where 9/11 had a direct impact.


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Sat Dec 03, 2005 4:37 am
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Oh wow, Brad. Please tell me you're exaggerating :|.




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Fri Dec 02, 2005 6:30 pm
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Recently, in my literary theory course, we discussed 9/11. We had an essay assignment to consider 9/11 as an interpretative textual being, something to analyze. My professor's sole comment is below, and I think it may elucidate some of the thoughts presented here.

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"First prize for cerebral coldbloodedness goes to you, Brad Stanley...it takes a rare, demonic genius to brush off the slaughter of thousands on the grounds that they were suffering from severe ennui brought about by boring modern architecture."




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I commented on this already via AIM but I guess I could do it again.

This was perhaps the best 9/11 poem, or commentary as you called it that I've read thus far. You gave the facts and yet the emotion was there as well. For some reason, I could hear music playing in the background of this poem. Very well-written especially since you wrote it about 9/11.

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Thu Dec 01, 2005 8:45 pm
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The sentences were so clean and easy to read. They were all statements that were easy to understand, nothing wishy-washy, just "This was that. That was this."

"like Noah after a bender"? ...





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