jennafina wrote:^^^ Ditto Daisy about the needle.
I like the concept. Its quite original, and keeps this from being average.
The line 'And did something very rare' seems really forced. Maybe you could rephrase that somehow?
yeah i think that line is my worst part, and i have to admit i did kind of force it. Hey what do expect from a poem that was written in like 5 minutes? lol :thumb:
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