This is suffocatingly OTT (Over The Top).
"Free," "sparkling," "smart," "pretty," "funny."
A five-year old could have come up with those words. Poetry comes from the investigation of the Self -- this investigation did not occur here. And the repetition was dull, boring, soporific at best.
Trash this sucker, pull out a notebook, and lisp your navel-gazing verse away.
Points: 890
Reviews: 915
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