hmmm...I probably shouldn't be trying to decifer this at this hour, oh well.
I liked how you began this poem, it made me what to read more. Norway...hmm? that was my train of thought.
Darkness is daylight–At least
loneliness isn’t prostitution–May God wrest me from sanity.
First, Darkness is daylight, I like the paradox, the primary opposites that you've presented here. Gives a sense of ethereality to it.
Second, At least
loneliness isn’t prostitution - wow what a way to phrase this particular feeling. I really like how you phrased this.
Third, May God wrest me from sanity. - wrest, you word choice here produces quite an image.
Ciocia..., the following lines read like a story, which gives the poem motion, tourist's rounds gives another perception of 'him' that he is an outsider.
In Bergen..., I thought it was very interesting that you chose the works that you did, again the allusions and the knowledge that it brings adds to the auro of 'he' and the poem.
The ending I have to say was to me, perfect. What a way to end it. I have to say that I really enjoy your poetry, you use no superfluous words, in essense in the smallest space you get in there, say what you have to and get out, but leave the piece with imagery and feeling.
I hope I've made some sense here.
-El-
Points: 890
Reviews: 34
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