It's always hard to critique song lyrics, because you don't know how the song goes, and alot of times things have to be written the way they are to fit a melody.
These were wonderful lyrics. The only thing I'd change was "Hold on to me tight," to "Hold me tight". It sounds a bit funny with the 'on to' if you say it out loud.
Good Job
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