The descriptions and underwrought emotion are too much. This has all been said before in about the same words. "Sitting together / in a chair" is enough to make any poet or reader stop reading immediately. The rest doesn't get much better. If you're going to write about love, it's going to have to be much fresher: either dramatically improved imagery and language or a metaphor that masks this.
Also, I don't really care what this poem's about, specifically. And the language isn't interesting enough to make me want to find out.
Points: 890
Reviews: 915
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