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I looked nervously at my watch; the time slowly ticking by. each agonizing minute creeping past. I looked around, my eyes wide; sweat beading on my forehead, tightly wringing my hands. I know there’s something wrong; something that will change the world that I lived in, forever.
Well this is quite the start. Its not nearly as powerful as one of those stories where we've got a bit of a mystery that hints and some potential destruction. This is sort of straight to the point letting us know that something big is happening. It does still do a pretty solid job of getting our attention though and the way its tied to this time and the title also makes for an interesting addition here.
I know about the bomb; overhearing a few 12th graders saying that they were going to leave school with a bang…
“John!” the shrill voice of my teacher interrupting my thoughts.
“y..y.yes?” I said questioning.
OKay well this is an interesting detail. Given how things were developing it seemed like some sort of more combat based setting and now here despite all the bombs it seems much more like we're somehow in some sort of school and somehow it also appears that our protagonist is a student. Well, this is certainly getting more intriguing as we continue here.
“are you feeling ok? because you don’t look so good” she said with just a hint of concern.” ever since last week you have been… distracted, and looking terrible; are you sure you’re ok, that there is nothing I can do to help.?”
“I’m fine” I lied, wishing to have the courage to tell her the truth.
“Don’t let all of the end of school excitement get to your head, it isn’t over yet.”
Well that's an interesting ending. It looks like we're completing ignoring and moving past the threat from earlier to end a very sort of first day at school kind of vibe. On one hand it really heightens the intrigue on terms of what could possibly be going on but its also a little bit of an anticlimax to end on here and I'm torn here. Overall, though, this is a decent piece.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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