Hello!
RandomTalks here with a short review!
I cannot tell if this was a short story or a prologue, but there seems to be definite context behind the happenings of this piece and since I was largely unaware of them, the story did come across as a little confusing to me. I could not understand what terms she kept referring to, but I guess that is what happens when you dare to jump into a story written more than a decade ago!
Even though, I did not understand everything, I was thoroughly invested throughout because of the strong narration. You have a really well-developed writing style and you know how to pull the readers in effectively. The narrator's thoughts were very clear and there was this sense of tension bubbling underneath evety word and thought in this short story that made it all the more exciting to read.
And what other dichotomy could have been interpreted within that copulation? Light and darkness? Life and death? Right and wrong?
I loved this part! You establish the seriousness and the grave contemlative mood of the story quite nicely in the very beginning. The readers know they are about to enter a new world and they actually look forward to it because of the setup.
One thing, however is to be clear about what you want this piece to represent. If its a prologue, then it does its job fantastically. If its a short story, however I am not sure how it stands on its own. It feels more like a short glimpse of something bigger and if you indeed want it to be an independent piece, then you should probably put in more dialogue and establish a beginning and ending. Otherwise the story seems to go nowhere and your readers will not be sure about what to take from it.
That's all!
Keep writing and have a great day!
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