Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
She stood tiny against the massive idol the vast crowd had knelt to worship.
Her hair was the color of silver although in truth she was not a day older than sixteen.
She was dressed in a simple white gown of fine taffeta, a bright red stone flashing upon her forehead.Meek and quiet Aisling was usally ignored but standing against the hught stone cow How could she be? Ice blue eyes flashing face set.
Her cry was heard through-out the temple.
"Stop now your foolish worship of this beast of burden but listen to me your Goddesses own prophet"
The astonished crowd fell silent.
Hmm...well this is an interesting piece. Its not often that I've seen something put up as purely an exercise in describing a scene rather than having some sort of bigger piece connected to it, but well let's give it a shot here to see what we have here. On first glance this certainly does seem like a fairly intriguing description, one that makes you quite curious despite it only have a fairly limited amount of actual description happening.
I think you have laid some very interesting groundwork in this particular piece and you can see this appears to have been lifted out of perhaps an established world given how a few things that seem relatively detailed on their own are mentioned somewhat in passing among the sort of central piece.
In terms of judging it as a story there isn't much to go on, but since this doesn't appear to be meant as one anyway, I won't dive too deep in there. As far as descriptions go, this one seems simple and quite effective at what it's trying to do. There's always benefit from going into more detail, but for how short this is, this works pretty well.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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