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Wyrdsong Chapter 1.1

by Elektra


Chapter 1.1

The Memory Wasn't Mine

The memory wasn't mine.

I knew it the moment it crept into my mind, coiling around my thoughts like smoke. The scent of damp earth, the weight of a blade in my hand, the screams of a city crumbling beneath its own illusions--none of it belonged to me. And yet, there I was, standing at the edge of a fractured cliff, staring into the jagged, glowing vastness of the Veil Rift as if I had lived this moment a thousand times.

"Princess Lyssantha," a voice broke through the haze. My tutor, Elder Sevrin, "The council waits. Would you prefer I tell them their heir is once again preoccupied with... distractions?"

The vision shattered, leaving me breathless. I blinked at the ink-stained parchment in front of me, my quill poised to write words I could no longer remember.

"Of course not," I said. I pushed the quill aside and stood, smoothing the folds of my violet robes, "Let them wait, Sevrin. They're quite good at it."

I followed Elder Sevrin down the winding hallways of the Silver Keep. My hands brushed against the violet silk of my robes, smoothing away invisible creases, though my mind remained elsewhere.

The Veil Rift. The jagged cliffs. The screams.

It wasn’t the first time I’d seen something like this--a flash of a memory that didn’t belong to me--but this one had felt sharper, more vivid. As if I’d truly been there, standing at the edge of some great catastrophe.

“Lyssantha, you’re drifting again,” Sevrin said, his voice tinged with the exasperation of someone who had long given up on gentler commentary. He glanced back at me, his dark eyes narrowing. “Whatever dreams haunt you, leave them at the door. You have a responsibility to your House, and today’s council meeting is not one to neglect.”

“I’m perfectly aware of my responsibilities,” I said, though my tone betrayed more irritation than assurance. “And I’m not dreaming. It was just... a thought.”

“A thought, or another one of your visions?”

I didn’t answer. His question hung in the air as we arrived at the double doors of the council chamber.

The silver etchings on the doors depicted a scene of the Bloom, the event that had marked the Age of Ascendance and granted the Houses their power. The Wyrd’s colorful lights danced across the carved figures.

Sevrin gave me a long look, then pushed the doors open.

The council chamber was filled with the soft murmur of conversation, the kind that always ended the moment I entered. Seven pairs of eyes turned toward me as I stepped inside, each gaze weighing me, measuring me, and finding me lacking.

At the head of the table sat my father, High Teller Alira. His silver hair gleamed in the soft glow of enchanted lanterns, and his stern expression was as familiar as the walls of this room.

“You’re late, Lyssantha,” he said, almost sounding agitated, “Again.”

“I was studying,” I said, taking my place to his right.

Councilor Elyndra, seated two chairs down, snorted softly, “Studying what, I wonder? Another one of those fanciful illusions your House is so fond of?”

The room chuckled lightly, though my father’s expression didn’t shift.

“I’m afraid it’s far less exciting than that,” I said, forcing a polite smile, “Trade agreements. Tax levies. You know, the things that make the world spin.”

Elyndra’s smirk faded slightly, but she didn’t respond. My father cleared his throat, and the room fell silent.

“We were discussing House Ithis’s recent ambushes into Bardmire’s northern borders,” he said, his voice carrying the weight of authority. “Their emissaries claim it was a simple misunderstanding, but their movements suggest otherwise. Lyssantha, as heir to this House, your thoughts on this matter are important.”

“My thoughts?” I asked, meeting his gaze. “Or the thoughts you want me to have?”

The tension in the room thickened. My father’s eyes narrowed slightly.

“I think,” I continued, leaning back slightly in my chair, “that House Ithis doesn’t make simple mistakes. If they’ve overstepped, it’s because they see an opportunity. The question is whether we let them believe they’ve gotten away with it.”

My father nodded slowly, though I couldn’t tell if he approved or merely tolerated my answer. “Elyndra, what are our options?”

As the discussion continued, I let the words wash over me, half-listening as the council debated strategies and alliances. My mind drifted back to the vision, to the cliff, to the Rift.

The memory wasn’t mine, but it had felt real. Too real.

“Lyssantha.”

My father’s voice jolted me from my thoughts. I blinked, realizing the room had gone silent. Seven pairs of eyes were once again fixed on me.

“Do you have anything to add?” he asked, his tone even but expectant.

“No,” I said quickly. “No, I think you’ve covered everything.”

His gaze lingered on me for a moment, and I saw the faint flicker of disappointment in his eyes before he turned back to the council. When the meeting finally ended, I lingered in the chamber, waiting until the others had left. My father remained at the table, sorting through papers and maps with meticulous care.

“You were distracted today,” he said without looking up.

“I wasn’t,” I lied.

“You were,” he said firmly, setting the papers down, “And distraction is dangerous, Lyssantha. Not just for you, but for the House.”

I hesitated. I wanted to tell him about the vision, about the Rift and the screams and the memory that didn’t belong to me. But I knew what he would say: It’s a trick of the Wyrd. A story you’ve spun for yourself.

So I said nothing.

“I’ll do better,” I said instead, glancing at my feet.

He studied me for a moment, then nodded, “See that you do.”

~

The library was quiet when I returned. I sank into one of the cushioned chairs, staring at the blank page of the journal I had brought with me. The memory still lingered, vivid and unyielding. The scent of damp earth. The weight of the blade. The screams.

And the Rift, glowing like a wound carved into the world.

I picked up my quill and began to write, the words spilling onto the page before I could stop them.

The memory wasn’t mine.

But whose was it?

The question pulsed in my mind. The Wyrd--our world’s lifeblood, the current that binds us all--has a way of seeping into places it doesn’t belong. For most, it manifests as the power of their House, a connection inherited and cultivated over generations.

For me, it was different. The Wyrd didn’t just give me power--it gave me glimpses of things I couldn’t explain. Memories, stories, fragments of lives I had never lived. Sometimes they were fleeting, little more than flashes of light and sound. Other times, like today, they were overwhelming, pulling me into places that felt all too real.

I leaned back in my chair, staring at the words I had written. The memory wasn’t mine, but it had felt important. Urgent.

Something was stirring in the Rift. I didn’t know what it was, but the Wyrd didn’t send visions for no reason. It was trying to tell me something. I closed the journal and pressed my fingers to the cover. Whatever was happening, it would have to wait. My father had made it clear where my priorities needed to be, and running after silly memories wasn’t among them.

But as I sat there, I couldn’t shake the feeling that this memory, this vision, was different.

And I was going to find out why. I rang the bell to my right, the sound ringing in my ears long after it stopped. My handmaiden, Rose, slowly opened the mahogany doors. Her long, blonde hair was tied into a messy braid-- pulled loosely to the side. I grinned at the leftover stains on her apron from the peach cobbler she made the night before. 

"Locate Basil. Have her meet me in the courtyard in approximately twelve minutes."

"Will do, Princess," Rose bowed once before exiting the same way she came. I grinned wider and turned back to my empty parchment. It wasn't long before I bit my lip, and started writing. 


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Hello, I'm new here and would like to fill out one of my 5 reviews for a star...
Or so I'd like so say.
I'm a big fan of fantasy stories, and this one definitely caught my eye. As a newbie writer, all I can see are complimentable things, especially the part where princess Lyssantha makes a daring reply to the councilor, she sure is not a mere puppet to be messed with, but a to be hero.
I'm not confident enough to make big comments like Crow or Raven, but I'm looking forward to the continuation of the series. I think I can learn a few things here.

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Hey! AnotherCrowInRow (or simply Kay) is here to review the first and fantastic looking chapter.
So. First off...the cover looks amazing - the font, the color palette... I don't know if it's your own creation, but if so, great job as it looks really amazing.
Well, let's get to the story itself, shall we?

The memory wasn't mine.

The first thing that I liked right from the beginning is the fact that the title of the chapter is also the first sentence... which is very catchy. No long narrative, simply the fact that some dream does not belong to the main character... which equals immediate reader interest, so to speak. Well played Elektra, well played, since I couldn't tear myself away from reading anymore :D
I like the description of the dream and the good bits of worldbuilding that you give the story from the very beginning.

I pushed the quill aside and stood, smoothing the folds of my violet robes, "Let them wait, Sevrin. They're quite good at it."

I followed Elder Sevrin down the winding hallways of the Silver Keep. My hands brushed against the violet silk of my robes, smoothing away invisible creases, though my mind remained elsewhere.

I feel like maybe this part could be said a little differently? I'm not talking about the dialogue, I just noticed that two paragraphs in a row talk about the robe. It's not a big mistake, I just feel like the text doesn't flow that well after that...hope you understand what I'm trying to say, hehe.

The silver etchings on the doors depicted a scene of the Bloom, the event that had marked the Age of Ascendance and granted the Houses their power. The Wyrd’s colorful lights danced across the carved figures.

Another worldbuilding moments right here! YAY! (I have a huge soft spot for worldbuilding stuff)

“I was studying,” I said, taking my place to his right.

Councilor Elyndra, seated two chairs down, snorted softly, “Studying what, I wonder? Another one of those fanciful illusions your House is so fond of?”

The room chuckled lightly, though my father’s expression didn’t shift.

“I’m afraid it’s far less exciting than that,” I said, forcing a polite smile, “Trade agreements. Tax levies. You know, the things that make the world spin.”

Two things: 1) I do know nothing about Elyndra yet, but I am already interested in this person, whoever they are. 2) House things looks to be part of worldbuilding about which I would love to learn more!

“My thoughts?” I asked, meeting his gaze. “Or the thoughts you want me to have?”

Oh, I bet there is some bit of a family drama going on.

Overall, I really like how the first part of the first chapter went - we get to know the characters that will obviously show up later (but at the same time, there aren't too many of them, so you don't feel lost).
I really appreciate how you incorporated wordbulding into the chapter - you mention some things throughout the chapter, but we only get some kind of explanation at the end. She also sketched out elements of a dynamic between the characters that I hope to see more of...and I'm really interested in who Basil is. From the beginning of the story, you can feel that there is some amount of world building and magic system, and as a person who loves well-thought-out worlds in stories, I'm a fan of that. Overall, this is just one great first chapter. Great job! :D

Have a nice rest of day/night/whatever is in your timezone and stay safe! :D




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Thank you so much! :D I'm glad you enjoyed and thank you for the feedback!



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Hello Again, My Friend!

It’s me, Raven, and I’m here to review this lovely story opening! I'm still tweaking the Familiar method to fit my compulsive brain, so again, the format may be a little different. That said...Let's dive in, shall we?

What The Black Eyes See
~ A full analysis and breakdown


Wow!! What an incredible story opening!! I'm seeing all the things I hoped to find from an Eleyktra novel--the vivid descriptions, the attention to detail, the personality in each character. Only, what really drew my interest was the use of a first-person perspective!! Bold choice, and I don't know if it's something you've done before in a story, but so far it's very well done! Let's get into the details though.

Plot and Pacing: Great! This was a very solid story opening. It spared no expense; we got introduced to some key conflicts, characters, and elements of worldbuilding, but at the same time, there is enough vagueness and mystery left to not only keep the reader from being overwhelmed, but leave us intrigued and curious enough to keep reading.

Descriptions and Setting: Absolutely stunning! Not just the setting or sensory notes, but the thoughts of the narrator, the nonverbal cues, and elements like the Rift or Wyrd. Through the overall tone, I am definitely getting that feel for medieval politics, a dark fantasy world, and epic themes of magic/spirituality. Love it!

Characterization: Great! I have to focus on the star of the show, Lyssantha! The way her character is presented and engaging with others, with subtle cues like her unintentionally irate tone and a smirk being quick to fade, it's clear that she finds herself in a rough spot--stuck between these persisting visions, concerns about the Rift, and being a crucial figure in the leadership of her House. The way she addresses her father with snarky comebacks makes it clear that she has a sense of boldness, and it's always a tossup in whether that trait becomes beneficial or a hindrance first in a character. Overall, I'm incredibly curious about her--and this "Basil" character mentioned at the end.

Grammar and Spelling: I didn't catch anything in this regard, so great work!


Where The Dagger Points
~ Some nitpicks and little recommendations


I didn't really find anything to put here, to be honest, so this section stays empty!


Why The Grin Widened
~ My reactions, theories, and favorite parts


Too early to form theories! I need to get a better feel of these concepts and characters first. However, as for reactions...

The scent of damp earth, the weight of a blade in my hand, the screams of a city crumbling beneath its own illusions--none of it belonged to me. And yet, there I was, standing at the edge of a fractured cliff, staring into the jagged, glowing vastness of the Veil Rift as if I had lived this moment a thousand times.


I love how short and sweet this vision is! Normally, when I read a story opening that features a dream or vision, they are very drawn out, often leading the reader to believe they're in the fray of the action before the character wakes up and reveals the "twist"--which, while I enjoy most of the time, is admittedly a trope for high fantasy. I like this new approach; how it just seamlessly ties into the overarching story, and how it's so open to theories and interpretations! Plus, I would imagine it's an even greater mental strain to be dropped randomly into fleeting moments of terror throughout the day lol.

The silver etchings on the doors depicted a scene of the Bloom, the event that had marked the Age of Ascendance and granted the Houses their power. The Wyrd’s colorful lights danced across the carved figures.

The Wyrd--our world’s lifeblood, the current that binds us all--has a way of seeping into places it doesn’t belong.

The memory still lingered, vivid and unyielding. The scent of damp earth. The weight of the blade. The screams.

And the Rift, glowing like a wound carved into the world.


I couldn't decide which of these to put here, so I put them all, and my reaction to all was: YES, YES, YESSS!! I am such a sucker for fantasy worldbuilding, and the concepts you create here all sound SO cool! Also love the names. The "Bloom" sounds fascinating, but for some reason, that title alone gives me somewhat evil vibes--don't know why. Oh man, I can't wait to learn about the magic system (beware a mini essay of nerdy overanalysis XD). Overall, so good!!

“My thoughts?” I asked, meeting his gaze. “Or the thoughts you want me to have?”


I just wanted to exclaim "OH SNAP!" at that--such a good comeback that caught me completely off guard.

Our Mad Thoughts...


Overall, what an absolutely incredible chapter! It had all the trademarks of a great introduction, and I'm curious where it will lead (no pressure tho lol)! Nicely done! :D


Thus concludes my review. To leave off, here are some inspiring quotes, courtesy of your resident Poe freak ~

"They who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night."

"Words have no power to impress the mind without the exquisite horror of their reality.”

"I would define, in brief, the poetry of words as the rhythmical creation of Beauty."




Elektra says...


Ahh thank you so much raven! :3



Elektra says...


Ahh thank you so much raven! :3




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