Young Writers Society

Oh my goodness!!! WHAT A PLOT TWIST ENDING!! I was not expecting that car crash and death o: I am so glad I found this one that you made in 2024!! I just finished reading the other version from 2022 and this one is a lot darker!! I love the contrast of the plots... one happy and this one... just devastating. You did a wonderful job making this very fast paced but also allowing us to connect to the characters. You tell us about how they bond and where they play together and the similar interests they have, they really were best friends. I like how Katie seems to come back in the end... or does she. I feel like this could have a really amazing next part where she makes the rose garden!

In terms of the pictures, they were fantastic!! I can really see how your drawings have grown in the last two years since the other story. Amazing work, once again, with bright colors and beautiful designs. This was such a pleasure to read and I love seeing beautiful and creative things like this on YWS. You have really inspired me to make my own!!

Your friend,
Ellie

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm Kate and I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression

Well I should've expected from the description this was going to have something a little less wholesome to it but I am glad you added a little bit of supernatural to the end. Its still very tragic but we're not left completely heartbroken.

Anyway let's get right to: Kate's Line by Line Reactions;

“I sure do hope I make friends… We should ALWAYS have someone to play with at recess!”

“Look! Someone wants to play with me!”

“I’m having so much fun!”

“Katie says that she likes unicorns, cupcakes, fairies, and flowers…like me!”

“We should make a fairy garden when we grow up! The biggest and beautifulest EVER!”

“But for now, I’m just glad that I met Katie.”

“We play everywhere now.”

“At school.”

“At the playground.”

“Even at my backyard!”

“In fact, Katie is here! At my sixth birthday party!”

“There are unicorns, cupcakes, flowers, and fairies!”

“And ice cream too!”

“Katie, wait! Not too fast! Look both ways!”

“Katie…?”

“I can’t believe it…she’s dead. My bestest friend is DEAD!”

“Katie??? You’re here???”

“Okay, Katie. Whatever you say!”

Yo, pet semetery vibes. I felt chills when it showed Rose's happiness at seeing Katie again. Internally, I was like, "Rose, run RUN RUN!!!"

This was so eerie, like, knowing your stories, I knew something was going to happen, but the sudden supernatural event inside of what would look like a kids journal was just so eerie. Katie, or whatever is in her place, seems somewhat Malevolent, I hope nothing bad happens to Rose.

Thank you for yet another wonderful story.

Ah, cool!! This was an interesting new direction to tell one of your stories from! It kind of reminds me of Ib the game...me talking like anyone will recognize that game, usually they don't lol . Either way, cute but very dark in nature. I love that setup for a horror story!

As for the story itself: it sounded sweet and innocent, and Rose and Katie were both growing on me, but I should've known better while reading a Vampricone story, heh. Those last couple of pages were so eerie and cool, and explained the first story (which I also read) very well!

So, overall, no complaints! The drawings are great, they fit the theme perfectly, and the story was awesome! Nicely done!