Young Writers Society

Hi, mango here with a quick review!
No one else mentioned this but I felt your choice of theme to explore was really interesting, which is like meta-writing in a sense.
I like the gradual change of mood throughout the poem, where at the start one feels overwhelmed and horrible, like sitting under a mountain of stress and anxiety.
Afterwards though the mood gets uplifted which was really nice and rather unexpected.
The tone and use of language contributed a lot to the funky and unorthodox vibe of the poem which was a breath of fresh air compared to usual others. The language was direct and conversational yet slightly unsually, making for the inclusion of a casual vibe as well.
Overall this was a really cute poem which you don't see often.

hello! momo here with a review.

i like this poem a lot! it definitely was giving hamilton vibes which i am HERE for. i love how the whole poem feels rushed, stressed, and frantic. your rhymes are amazing, and as someone who can't rhyme, you have my respect. oftentimes stressful environments produce beautiful art, and you demonstrate that very well in this poem.

the only critique i have is that some of your rhythms and rhymes feel a little forced, but it is very difficult to get enough words to make a clean rhythm per line.

that's all i have to say! this poem is excellent; keep up the good work.
momo

Hey there! I saw you review my poem so I am going to review yours too c:. If you don't remember me, this is Ina aka loveissourgrapes and I am here to review/comment about your poem here. I saw it and it reminded me of Hamilton the Musical. I watch it a few days ago (not in real life though, just the movie) so yeah, I am glad I have gotten to read a poem about it. Anyways, let's get straight to the point of my review.

First impressions. I thought it was going to be like a really sad story and something that feels slow. But it actually feels better when you read it fast, like listening to Lin Manuel Miranda hihi. Sometimes, I do write stories and poems about school and stress before even doing it in the middle of the night. I write my scary thoughts too so they can go away in the middle of the night too. This can seem related to my recent poem A peaceful sleep so yeah. I do like it. I like your writing style too.

I love relatable poems and writings here on this site especially when they are written by my peers. It feels nice to know you are not alone when you feel like this. Because other people do too. Overall, it is good. Keep on writing poems. I love 'em! I hope you are okay right after writing this. Have a good day/night too!

Hiya! It's Koco (or Coko) here for a simple review!

First thing I noticed- I see someone here is a Hamilton fan. Haha, don't worry. I haven't listened in years and yet I remember every word.
As a fellow student and (boarderline obsessive) writer, I really feel this one. It's almost jarring seeing it put down on a page, reading it, and then realizing I didn't write this. It's nice to know that there are others out there who feel this and literally think "I need a break, let me write a bit."

So, overall, I thoroughly enjoyed this. It's a nice, simple piece about being a student and writer. Writing is always a nice escape for schoolwork, especially since you can get on Google Docs on a school computer and no one will say a thing.
I hope you have a wonderful day! (And that your workload becomes a little lighter soon )

Hiya! It's Koco (or Coko) here for a simple review!

First thing I noticed- I see someone here is a Hamilton fan. Haha, don't worry. I haven't listened in years and yet I remember every word.
As a fellow student and (boarderline obsessive) writer, I really feel this one. It's almost jarring seeing it put down on a page, reading it, and then realizing I didn't write this. It's nice to know that there are others out there who feel this and literally think "I need a break, let me write a bit."

So, overall, I thoroughly enjoyed this. It's a nice, simple piece about being a student and writer. Writing is always a nice escape for schoolwork, especially since you can get on Google Docs on a school computer and no one will say a thing.
I hope you have a wonderful day! (And that your workload becomes a little lighter soon )