Hi upinthearcher,
I am very happy to leave you an review.
Wow! this is poem is just like a wave of emotion that's being swooshed right over you. I love it very much. It's so powerful and it actually made me want to cry.
It's very bold of you that you've written it like a pure reality.
You have really fleshed out the reality of what it is when people and you don't understand yourself or how you can possible be yourself in this world.
These sentences really touched my heart:
"The big fat lie she let herself believe
Begging no one will see through it"
It's as if she is trying to be someone she is not. And she lets her herself believe that and want the people around her to believe that as well. It's really sad and also very deep going if you really take your time and think about it.
These sentences are also sooo typical:
"And now you’re just a boring toy
Never sad
But never exited enough"
These sentences really remind me of two songs that I know of Melanie Martinez: "PityParty" & "Playdate". I read these sentences four times to let the words sink in my head, one by one.
The title you chose: Pause
It Also speaks a lot to me and is very powerful.
I'm very happy I took time to appreciate your poem.
It really made my day and brought a big smile on my face. 😊
When you have time could you please read and review my work:
"Broken mirror image"
It's also a story I wrote about a harsh truth, it's not to brutal but it goes deep. Your poem reminded me of that story.
Keep up the great work! I loved reading it!
- Rinisha
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