Hello! Popping back in for another Review!
Once again, you've written a very compelling introduction, with a ton of great action! Though some of it felt a tad repetitive, mirroring the prior chapter, that might well be intentional, and could turn out to be a really cool motif! I also really liked the suspense you are building, about the mysterious lightning, and the strange stone box.
This is a minor nitpick, but I did notice that you use a lot of "filler phrases." Words like, suddenly and sentences such as indeed they were can bog down otherwise great writing, or slow down fast-paced action scenes. This isn't always the case, but it often disconnects the reader from the moment at hand.
I really liked how this chapter granted us insight on Elsa. Here, she displays her curiosity (and perhaps a little bit of foolishness?) when she bravely approaches the mysterious cube. She shows no apprehension, which seems to be an important trait in a hunter. However, I would like to see you dig a little deeper into her emotions.
For example, when the eagle shatters in her hand, I would've expected some kind of beat change. Maybe she's startled? Or she's suddenly frightened, and has to steel her stomach? Perhaps she isn't scared, but rather, morbidly curious. As great as this segment was, I did feel a little disconnected from Elsa.
Once again though, this is another very strong chapter! I adore how you managed to build up so much suspense in such a brief amount of time! I'll admit, I'm a little frightened for Elsa, and whatever evils she'll have to face.
With that said, amazing job so far! You've got two strong opening chapters, and I'm excited to see how you'll build off them!
Happy Review Day!