MEANWHILE
She knew. Oh, yes, she knew. It was a very dark feeling, one that only came at a time of great loss. Yes, she thought. I am definitely experiencing great loss. Soon they will pay. They think they already have, but they haven't.
BACK TO THE HEROES.
Today was the weirdest day ever. Thought Charlotte. I am flying and on a quest.
"Careful, y'all!" yelled Maddie. "We are near the Explosion Plains."
"Explosion-" BOOOOM! Suddenly. the ground beneath them exploded and sent everybody flying in different directions. They all screamed.
~~~~~
Charlotte landed on a cliff. It was a very nice cliff, honestly. She got up, and dusted herself off very formally. Then she realized that she was on the diamond mountains! She was right by a very large cave. It wasn't dark, however. It was shimmering sixty different colors, because on the inside, the mountain was filled with multicolored precious gems.
"Go left!"
No, RIGHT!"
Charlotte heard the vices of her teammates and was glad that they all weren't split up all over the place. She slowly walked over to them. "Oh, hi Charlotte!" said Toby. "we're all glad you're here!"
Charlotte was glad, too.
"Should we go left, or RIGHT?" Maddie said, and it was clear she wanted to go right.
"Maybe..." said Charlotte, having actually no idea where to go. "Left?" actually, it was a terrible idea.
ELLIE
Ellie already had a hard time tracking her sister and her friends. The explosion didn't help. Her feet were aching, and she felt incredibly tired.
Suddenly, she saw a lone figure wandering around. Hoping it was Charlotte, she ran over to it, and saw that it was not, in fact, her sister.
Instead it was a girl with long dark hair. her eyes were a strange violet.
"How did the Witches not capture you?" asked Ellie suspiciously. Something set her on edge.
"Because," said the girl, "I am one." Ellie screamed. The girl cut her off. "I know how to save everyone. I can help you. but... for a price."
Hmm…Who is thinking about making people pay? The Queen? Is the Queen a villain? Could it be Maddie? Or that witch girl Ellie met? The witch girl seems okay, but then again, witches are supposed to be evil in this universe and Ellie only JUST met her. What if the witch girl is another version of Charlotte? One Ellie and Charlotte herself wouldn’t be able to recognize?
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She knew. Oh, yes, she knew. It was a very dark feeling, one that only came at a time of great loss. Yes, she thought. I am definitely experiencing great loss. Soon they will pay. They think they already have, but they haven't.
Today was the weirdest day ever. Thought Charlotte. I am flying and on a quest.
"Careful, y'all!" yelled Maddie. "We are near the Explosion Plains."
"Explosion-" BOOOOM! Suddenly. the ground beneath them exploded and sent everybody flying in different directions. They all screamed.
~~~~~
Charlotte landed on a cliff. It was a very nice cliff, honestly. She got up, and dusted herself off very formally. Then she realized that she was on the diamond mountains! She was right by a very large cave. It wasn't dark, however. It was shimmering sixty different colors, because on the inside, the mountain was filled with multicolored precious gems.
"Go left!"
No, RIGHT!"
Charlotte heard the vices of her teammates and was glad that they all weren't split up all over the place. She slowly walked over to them. "Oh, hi Charlotte!" said Toby. "we're all glad you're here!"
Charlotte was glad, too.
"Should we go left, or RIGHT?" Maddie said, and it was clear she wanted to go right.
"Maybe..." said Charlotte, having actually no idea where to go. "Left?" actually, it was a terrible idea.
Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Ahhh I'm really starting to get invested here! We've got three separate POV's now and it seems like every single one ends on its own cliffhanger I love the tension you're building up that way. I wonder if at some point all of these POV's will end up meeting.
Anyway let's get right to it,
She knew. Oh, yes, she knew. It was a very dark feeling, one that only came at a time of great loss. Yes, she thought. I am definitely experiencing great loss. Soon they will pay. They think they already have, but they haven't.
Today was the weirdest day ever. Thought Charlotte. I am flying and on a quest.
"Careful, y'all!" yelled Maddie. "We are near the Explosion Plains."
"Explosion-" BOOOOM! Suddenly. the ground beneath them exploded and sent everybody flying in different directions. They all screamed.
Charlotte landed on a cliff. It was a very nice cliff, honestly. She got up, and dusted herself off very formally. Then she realized that she was on the diamond mountains! She was right by a very large cave. It wasn't dark, however. It was shimmering sixty different colors, because on the inside, the mountain was filled with multicolored precious gems.
"Go left!"
No, RIGHT!"
Charlotte heard the vices of her teammates and was glad that they all weren't split up all over the place. She slowly walked over to them. "Oh, hi Charlotte!" said Toby. "we're all glad you're here!"
Charlotte was glad, too.
"Should we go left, or RIGHT?" Maddie said, and it was clear she wanted to go right.
"Maybe..." said Charlotte, having actually no idea where to go. "Left?" actually, it was a terrible idea.
Ellie already had a hard time tracking her sister and her friends. The explosion didn't help. Her feet were aching, and she felt incredibly tired.
Suddenly, she saw a lone figure wandering around. Hoping it was Charlotte, she ran over to it, and saw that it was not, in fact, her sister.
Instead it was a girl with long dark hair. her eyes were a strange violet.
"How did the Witches not capture you?" asked Ellie suspiciously. Something set her on edge.
"Because," said the girl, "I am one." Ellie screamed. The girl cut her off. "I know how to save everyone. I can help you. but... for a price."
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