Young Writers Society

I loved this poem and how you used imagery to your advantage. The work has a very nice flow all throughout and utilizes amazing vocabulary.
The first stanza was an incredible introduction to the piece. Furthermore, the line “I belong everywhere and nowhere” feels very real, which gives it a nice ‘human touch,’ if that makes any sense.
Later in the poem, in the line “While uncertainty fills my lungs,” I am slightly confused on what’s you are trying to say. How exactly is uncertainty filling your lungs rather than your brain?
The last stanza had beautiful imagery throughout and an amazing and thought-provoking ending. But, one thing I am wondering is if you meant to have a rhyme scheme; the first stanza has a rhyme scheme (at least in how I pronounce those words), but none of the other stanzas do. Did you give up on the rhyme scheme half-way through or did it never have one in the first place?
Overall, this was a beautiful poem. Have a nice day and keep writing!

The truth behind this is that the world and the people in it can do a number on you but you still stand tall, the wounds grow wider, the scars reopen, the past you left behind comes back to haunt you, you won't be able to escape no matter how many layers you break through, you will never succeed in finding peace, when you start finding peace, it gets taken from you before it can emerge.

'A Storm' is beautiful.For a subject so profound,it is strangely not excessively loquacious.The uncertainty, the elusive coalescion of the spirit is beautifully potrayed.You are a master in your craft.The frenzy of her thoughts,the thrumming urgency.My particular favourite is 'The breeze of realization seizes me in a storm of reality'.For someone like her,I guess the waking hours would indeed be an anathema.

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The dark has become my haven

For reasons, I'm not aware.

The sky starts bleeding,

A heavy heart is celebrating.

The breeze of realization

Seizes me in a storm of reality.

This is a lovely poem of yours. I enjoyed it very well while it was raining very hard at my place. I felt the emotions while the wind as blowing hard on this stormy day. Every line, every word is creative and I think unique. Thank you for sharing this well-written poem of yours.Have a good day/night.

I enjoyed this piece. I like how in the first stanza you show a sense of uncertainty yet the message is really clear. "Soft breaths have my hair dancing, Their tears are the conclusion." has to be my favorite line. One question I do have is whether the narrator talking about somebody because the last stanza gives me that impression. Overall a great piece!