Hi this is gem writing his review. I am rusty so take it easy on me XD!
This was an interesting piece. It speaks about police brutality and how everything influences the black community. About how things are biased towards the white people in the legal system and they always assume the worst of others and try to take action on it before making sure it is right. It's definitely not right and I think that's an important topic. It's not a very happy topic and I'm glad that you had the confidence to talk about it. This is also a sonnet so, I think you did a pretty good job with that sonnets are already very difficult.
I understand that here hoary is supposed to rhyme with story but it sounds a little bit gaudy here. I would suggest switching it out with a different end rhyme like 'the cop goes to court what he says as a fable /how many times has the story been put on table'
That really is all the critique I have my favorite line would have to be 'Simply because he doesn't look like the rest/ Here the reason is not shrouded in mist'
The second line I mentioned is particularly impactful and I love it!
This is gem closing his review! Keep writing ! Stay safe!
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