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Light

by WelboLive


(a)Light is something that can be used, (7)

(b)And taken for granted.(6)

(a)It can be abused, (5)

(b)And leave you branded.(5)

(c)Light can be fire.(4)

(d)Leaving burns and scars,(5)

(c)Or bring light to the dire.(6)

(d)Locking some behind bars.(6)

(e)Light can be like a smile,(6)

(f)And brighten your day.(5)

(e)Or it can be hostile,(6)

(f)And scare you away.(5)

(g)Light can leave illusions,(6)

(h)And cause you to hesitate.(7)

(g)Some come to crazy conclusions,(8)

(h)Making even the sane debate.(8)


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Power can be used for good or for bad. It all depends on the person you give it to. Sometimes good people can turn bad when given power. Sometimes bad people and turn good. In the end, we have to hope that we give power to the right people. In the end, if we give power to truly good people, then we can trust that they will do good things with it.




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I liked this poem about light.Light isn’t just light,light can really change lives and cause problems in the process.It all depends on someone’s perspective and how people will view light.This is a good poem to explain light and how it can affect people in many different ways.Light symbolizes perspective and viewpoints,I believe.I hope you have a great day/night.Lovely read!




WelboLive says...


Hello, vampricone6783! Thank you for your positive review, and I am glad you liked my poetry!
Have a nice day, morning, night, afternoon!
-Welbo



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hi i im here to drop off an review

Lets get started!

First off this was an excellent poem and always this was such a amazing vibe poem when at soon i read this impressive poem and poems like this was a good rhyme poem anyway and i know its your first time doing a poem and you will get it soon at later on what these reviews are its about the people on what they think about how is your poem and why this and that

My compliment is this was a good touchy good vibe poem and its giving me like full vibes right now and i also have a favorite line in your first poem(a)Light is something that can be used, (7)

(b)And taken for granted.(6)

(a)It can be abused, (5)

(b)And leave you branded.(5)

(c)Light can be fire.(4) this what i like about your poem i love the way you got in the way you have the words like most people don't do this

How you can improve is on working something new and try others things i would give you a quick review on your work i will be free to give you one like i im right now

Keep Writing!!

-jay




WelboLive says...


Hi, Jay! Thank you for your feedback and happy review! I appreciate the support and help!
Love,
Welbo!



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Also, If you need help with some of the basics of getting started with the young writers society I can help with that I know that I joined and was a little bit confused as to how to earn points, but if you need help with something else I am sure I can help with that too. Other than that have a great day/night/afternoon/morning!




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Hey there, and welcome to YWS! Sammmwich here, with a review!

This is a great poem! I see you wrote out what the rhyme scheme was which did confuse me a bit as people do not usually do that. Was there a specific reason you did this, or were you just writing it because you are learning? Either way, this poem has a deep meaning and has good flow. So good job on that and keep writing!




WelboLive says...


Hello Sammmwich! Thank you for your review! Regarding your question, I always struggle when I read poems and need to know the rhyme scheme and meter for school or work. I thought I would put it in my poetry for anyone who might also struggle with it! Have a good day, afternoon, night, morning!




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