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isolation, my old friend

by midnight786


Some days I don’t feel anything

As if my body has thrown out my heart

I eat, I breathe, I sleep

Rinse and repeat


On those days, Isolation grabs my hands and doesn’t let go

It pulls me into bed and places the covers over me

“Rest, you need rest.”

So I rest, hoping that my heart will return to me


When it comes, it comes violently

As if all those unfeeling days have decided to make themselves known

Before, I couldn’t find my tears, now they refuse to stop

Isolation wipes my tears, “You need this.”


The hole in my heart is somehow the heaviest weight

I sink into every place I sit, lay, and stand

My home remembers me, it cares for me, it won’t leave me

Isolation reminds me that outsiders do not have that guarantee


One day, I decide to leave

As I reach for the doorknob,

Isolation yanks me by my wrist

The welcome mat slowly fading from my view


“They won’t care for you like me.

There’s nothing out there that isn’t here.

The things outside won’t help you, won’t make you happy.”

And as always, I realize Isolation is right


Isolation jabs pitchforks and warning signs on the lawn

It glides over and whispers in my ear,

“For protection.”

I believe it, the outside world has never been kind to me

Who will keep me safe like my Isolation


“I’m lonely,” I murmur

“No, you’re happy, you prefer this.”

It’s safe where we live

No changes and I like it this way

I like it this way


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Tue Oct 19, 2021 2:13 pm
Caiteb wrote a review...



Hey its Caite swinging on by with a review. First of all I just want to say this is incredible. I want hundred percent felt like I was in the moment with you. I love how you use personification with the feeling of isolation. This piece left me in awe. Your writing is absolutely stunning. I love this!!!! I hope you have a fantastic day or night.




midnight786 says...


Hi Caite, thank you for your kind words!



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Good morning, afternoon, evening, night, or whatever applies to you in your respective time zone. Anyway, onto the review. This was a very powerful poem. It questions what loneliness truly is, as well as pointing out the difference between being lonely, and being alone. This poem allows the reader to relate, even if they don’t have any experience in the topic you’re describing.

“I’m lonely,” I murmur
“No, you’re happy, you prefer this.”
It’s safe where we live
No changes and I like it this way
I like it this way

I think this was my favorite part of the poem. I loved how it shows the two warring sides of the narrator, as well as the fear of change. But the best part was the repeating words, “I like it this way”, as if the narrator is trying to convince themselves.

I don’t believe I have any critiques for you, so I’ll end this review here. I really enjoyed this poem, and hope to see more of your work around soon! Stay safe, and keep writing!

-Lizzy




midnight786 says...


Thank you so much for the review! I appreciate your kind words : )



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I absolutely love this poem!! It's very beautifully and poetically written but at the same time doesn't hold back from being brutally real and honest. Your writing style is lovely, and this personaification of the fickleness of Isolation and the emotions it evokes is fantastic. My favourite line is, "When it comes, it comes violently," because it holds so true and perfectly encapsulates the poem. With this simple phrase you've described the experience of every person who has gone through this (myself included). Overall, fantastic!! I have no critiques. Keep writing (:




midnight786 says...


Thank you so much for your kind words! I really appreciate them!



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Thu Sep 02, 2021 11:32 am
TrinityPoeting wrote a review...



hello midnight786! Nicole here with a short review.




first off: W O W this is an amazing, but also a very sad poem. I really like the way it flows. and the topic was very interesting, how you want to leave isolation, but it also draws you back in. I like that you made ''isolation'' a talking character.
I also really love the way it ends.

“I’m lonely,” I murmur

“No, you’re happy, you prefer this.”

It’s safe where we live

No changes and I like it this way

I like it this way


it's really powerful.



what you could do to improve: from what I could tell, there's nothing that needs changing.




in conclusion: I thought it was an excellent poem!

keep writing!

- Nicole




midnight786 says...


Hi Nicole!

I'm glad you enjoyed it and thank you for the review!



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Hi, and good morning/ afternoon/ evening/ night/ or whatever it is in your corner of the world! Wren here for a little review!

First impression: this is an amazing poem! It really resonates with me and it is written really well!

Some days I don’t feel anything

As if my body has thrown out my heart

I eat, I breathe, I sleep

Rinse and repeat
This. I feel this. You really capture what it feels like to not feel. It may have been clearer if you had written “I eat, breathe, sleep” instead, but it’s just personal preference!

“They won’t care for you like me.

There’s nothing out there that isn’t here.

The things outside won’t help you, won’t make you happy.”
Yes, just the lies we’re told to keep us trapped in ourselves.


I like it this way
I really like this last sentence, it sounds like the writer is trying to convince themselves!

Overall a fantastic poem, keep up the great work! I look forward to reading more!




midnight786 says...


Thank you so much for the kind review! I really appreciate it!



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Thu Sep 02, 2021 1:48 am
IMK wrote a review...



Hey, IMK here.

I'm here to review what looks like a rollercoaster of a poem, and I'm really excited for it!

I hope you enjoy YWS!

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"I eat, I breathe, I sleep

Rinse and repeat"

this is me but add swim practice and school lmao

In all seriousness, I think this is a really interesting line, and it has a lot of muted feelings. I don't really know how to explain it, but it's like there's no emotion and it's completely apathetic, but also behind the wall of apathy, there is crying, wailing, whatever you want to call it, it's there, and it's tired. It's exhausted and has no more strength to do anything but eat, breathe, and sleep.

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"On those days, Isolation grabs my hands and doesn’t let go

It pulls me into bed and places the covers over me

“Rest, you need rest.”

So I rest, hoping that my heart will return to me"

First things first. I really love the use of a concept as a character (I do it pretty often myself).
My thoughts on your portrayal of the character Isolation is like a greedy yet kind person (thing? emotion? concept?) who wants the best for you, but also has this loneliness (greediness), wanting you to stay despite knowing that being alone, while good for you, could be damaging.

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I really love your poem, and there are so many more things that I could talk about for hours, I just want to sit and reread this over and over, and i know i wont get much more done.

Ill probably come back and write the rest of the review in the next couple days, so look forward to that!

Have a great day!

- IMK




midnight786 says...


Hi IMK, nice to meet you!

Thank you so much for your kind words. : ) I'm glad you enjoyed it. Your analysis was really fun to read. It's really touching to read people's thoughts and theories on your writing. You got exactly what I was trying to convey.

Honestly, this review is more than I was expecting for my first review. It was a very pleasant surprise, so thank you! I look forward to hearing the rest of your review!

Hope you have a great day too!

-Midnight




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