Hello! Wallflower here with a quick review
This is a lovely poem, made all the more powerful by its briefness.
The night she stood in front of me
Here, you could add a comma after "night": that would help the pacing and indicate that it's the Night Herself talking to you, not just a night on which a woman talked to you.
Don't look me with those eyes."
"That shine you reserve for day
Here, you don't need the quotes in between "eyes" and "That", as it's a single quote.
Overall, this covers a subject I think many of us on this website can relate to in a lovely way. Personification is such a lovely literary device, and you've used it wonderfully. This is a calming and wonderful poem. Great job!
Keep writing.
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