Hello, Rubes, Lee's here to review your work!
You wrote a piece on why we love a place, didn't you? This is quite a nice follow-up to that. However, this is evidently more opinionated. I disagree with a couple of things you say, but it's really just a matter of opinion, so I'll put those aside in my review.
Most often between relatives however adults that have been friends since a young age can feel almost like they are relatives
Okay, so this is the first of multiple instances where you've used "however" without the necessary punctuation. There are some basic rules you need to follow when using the word to provide contrast; the link below is quite helpful, if you're interested in learning hot to use it properly.
https://web.sonoma.edu/users/f/farahman ... owever.pdf
The love for your partner is different to the love you have for friends and family ect in many ways.
Typo: I think you mean "etc," (The comma is required too, by the way.)
to make the classic duo work well ;
1. What do you mean by "classic duo?" It's a slightly odd way to describe a couple, no?
2. Delete the space before the semicolon.
obviously there also needs to be elements like humor or hobbies in the mix, however trust is the one thing that is required in a romantic relationship or you risk the mentally draining impact of heartbreak.
1. Need, not "needs.
2. This is another instance where you've used "however" incorrectly.
3. Instead of "one" I suggest using "main," because you just listed what other factors need to be in a relationship.
Yeh it isn’t lovey-dovey like the more romanticized love
There's no need to explain this, really.
Every true friend will have arguments from time to time, however with these attributes
Another time you've used "however" without the necessary punctuation.
just because of how stupid and small the actual problem is.
Okay, I know what I said about not disputing your opinion, but I'd like to point out that this is very subjective. You cannot assume all arguments are over stupid reasons. That isn't true.
honest answers and wholesome love for eachother and I, myself is good.
1. The grammar in this sentence is a bit convoluted, try to rephrase what you're saying a little.
2. You missed a space in "each other."
it is pretty easy to begin a conversation and get to know someone.
What about people with anxiety? What about introverts? What about someone who's really shy?
Another important type of love is admiration.
I would argue that love and admiration are closely related but not the same. Not always.
Being averagely confident can seem insecure whereas having a good mindset and love for yourself seems braggy, boasty or even cocky
"Braggy" and "boasty" are not real words. "Boastful" is. As for bragging, perhaps you could say "vain?"
All in all, it's a nice piece. Some general aspects like grammar and punctuation can be worked on, but you've put in a lot of effort and this came out rather well. Setting aside my own opinions, I think you've phrased what you meant to say properly. Good job on that! You show quite a bit of talent.
if my review was too critical or harsh, I apologise. I'm just trying to help!
~ Lee
Points: 18564
Reviews: 278
Donate