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Thirteen Ways of Looking at a Question Mark

by waywardxwallflower


I.

I’m not quite sure

Why it looks like that

II.

A cane, to reel me back in

To remind me that there are things

That I don’t know

III.

That I will never know

An endless abyss of questions

That none know the answer to

Will I ever be complete without the knowledge

I cannot have?

IV.

There it is again, that mark

That maddening figure of human limits

V.

That mockery of the smallness of my mind

VI.

But sometimes I must be content

VII.

And look at a flower without

Knowing its species or how it works

How the petals find themselves to be so beautiful

And sometimes knowing less is understanding more

VIII.

Contentedness can be found

In the ticks of time

The minutes that I find myself

Unwilling to name

IX.

Ignorance is bliss

X.

But ignorance is also hatred

XI.

The willing lack of knowledge can

Be harmful, can hurt

And sometimes ignorance is not bliss at all

But murder

XII.

Can completeness be found

Without a knowledge of everything?

XIII.

Some things are to be known

And some are not

But maybe I will try

To push my limits


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Thu May 13, 2021 4:10 pm
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aooborromeo wrote a review...



Hi! It's me Via and I'm here for a review! So... let's get started.

POSITIVES:
How could I not like a poem that says in the description, inspired by aooborormeo's Thirteen Ways of Looking at a Blank. My god, poets should always take inspiration from each other. Wow! I'm very flattered.

Seriously though, this is very good. I can tell that this poem might be somewhat rushed, but well thought out! I love the idea of using a question mark, to me that just speaks volumes of what ideas you want to explore as a poet and an artist.

I LOVE THIS STANZA, and I'm just saying that for the heck of it.

A cane, to reel me back in

To remind me that there are things

That I don’t know


This right here, is excellent! I love the exploration and play off the imagery of a question mark and bringing a more philosophical approach to it. Nice job on that!

and then, I don't often enjoy questions in poetry too much, but I like this here

Can completeness be found

Without a knowledge of everything?


Exploring the idea of knowledge and ignorance is something that many writers can relate to.

The broken concept of dividing IX and X, is a bit abrupt but it works well!

CRITIQUES:

My poem was very old and like yours, has some rhythmic issues. Just a little editing and experimenting on how to present your ideas will make this poem even better. Read your poem out loud, it helps spot those muddled sections.

I noticed you obviously kept question marks, but utilize periods to add more structure and emphasis to your poem. It would help with the flow of each section.

Auto capitalization is the bane of all poets. Lines that are a part of the same sentence don't all need to be capitalized. Just look at it.

This stanza:

And look at a flower without

Knowing its species or how it works

How the petals find themselves to be so beautiful

And sometimes knowing less is understanding more


I can see what you're trying to do here with the flower imagery. However, when it comes to writing imagery with a poem of this particular structure, while less is more, rhythm I think here and some rewriting will do this section some good.

Finally, this just might be me being picky, try to bold the roman numerals, makes it easier to read.

My biggest piece of advice that I got for my poem, was to edit and edit and edit! Try to keep exploring the question mark theme and write little stanzas. Then take them out, put them in, move it around. Experiment!

Overall, wonderful poem! I'm impressed! Keep on writing!






Thanks so much!! And yeah, I literally did not edit this I was just like yeah. Good enough. But I definitely will!



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Hi, Pineapple here for a little review!

Wow, I thought this was a really smart idea. The poem was so dramatic and could make the reader think. Who knew that a question mark could have so much behind it? I really liked the format of it as well. Instead of using regular numbers, you used Roman numerals.

I especially like the lines "Ignorance is bliss/But ignorance is also hatred." I really like the phrase "ignorance is bliss". And, yes, ignorance can also be hatred because deep down we're neglecting something.

Overall, amazing job. I enjoyed reading this. I hope you keep writing!

Signed,
Pineapple






thanks so much !!! ^_^




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