Hi haraya, haven't seen any of your works before, oops now I remember you. I am here after seeing this one in green room and actually found time to review it :>. Here I go
I am a huge fan of this kind of poetry with abrupt line breaks, imagery both random and meaningful, no actual goal to achieve in the poem, just letting one go with the words and enjoy the journey. Your description mentioned an exam and poetry as a way to calm yourself so I guess this is what you did here. Certainly not a perfect poem but a really good one.
I believe you had a vague idea in mind of what to do and included stuff you saw around you. In terms of mood and atmosphere overall you managed to convey a really cool, spooky-ish atmosphere. Words such as stern, prayer, static and cry are perfect in their spots and work wonders in the flow of the poem. You have other images in the poem that are pretty good: marked doors, prophetic weathermen, dying TV's.
However, even if this isn't one of the poems that do the stuff like other poems do and make everything clear and straight across, I can't really enjoy how intricate some images are made and how basic and blunt other images are. Like take for example "The windows wail/ a chillin cry" and next you have the really simple "doors are marked/ with drizzle". To keep it in theme I would do something like ''doors are marked/ moon's tears-dripping" or something like that.
Great poem nevertheless, loved reviewing it. Good luck in your future writings!
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