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Adieu!

by NivedaJames22


Goodbye!

I was writing with glee

When my clock reminded me

That the day's almost done,

And my bed awaits me.

So adieu I must bid

To my fellow writer friends,

And crawl under the covers

For a much needed rest.


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Sat Apr 17, 2021 3:24 am
Beepbeepwomp says...



Omg I loved this. I have the attention span of a goldfish so a nice short poem is always appreciated. Loved the rhymes and relatability.






Thank you! (:



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Thu Apr 15, 2021 3:11 am
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This is a really short poem so it's not like I can find much to critique lol but yeah, basically what the other reviewer said. It's a cute poem and I like the word Adieu so that makes me instantly appreciate it.

I love the flexibility of poetry though, how one poem can be about this deep-dark-thought-provoking-things and then we have poems like this. They both are equally nice to read though and sometimes it's good to read a poem that's more simple and sweet like this one

I would have no idea where to add critique in this, I feel like if you changed anything then the poem would lose it's simplistic feel I guess ? I don't know, anyway, speaking of sleep actually I could use that






Hey CreativeUsername!
Thanks for reviewing! Sleep well :)



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Tue Apr 13, 2021 7:38 pm
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Hey, Zekcede here!

Thsis is really cute!

I like that its really short and simple but also has a pretty meaningful(?) background. I also really like the rhyme scheme in the first four lines, so... yea! I also really like the general style of writing, its really appealing. I was also wondering, could expand a bit on the narrator? because then we will have a bit of background fro the context of the poem.


Keep writing, you're doing great!


-Z

(sorry for double posting)






Honestly, I wrote this when I was leaving a WriterFeedPad last night...that's the context. I posted it 'cause I think it turned out pretty well for something that I wrote in around five minutes.
Thanks for reviewing! :)



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Tue Apr 13, 2021 7:36 pm
zekcede says...



Hey, Zekcede here!

Thsis is really cute!

I like that its really short and simple but also has a pretty meaningful(?) background. I also really like the rhyme scheme in the first four lines, so... yea! I also really like the general style of writing, its really appealing. I was also wondering, could expand a bit on the narrator? because then we will have a bit of background fro the context of the poem.


Keep writing, you're doing great!


-Z





Proud people breed sad sorrows for themselves.
— Emily Bronte, Wuthering Heights