Hey!
RandomTalks here with a short review!
Well, this was truly something else. It was a little confusing for me, because I don't exactly have a very scientific mind. But from what I understood this man goes hopping across time by placing his finger on any point across a time globe. I loved how you modified the time travelling theory and added your own unique twist to it. There was this anticipation throughout the story to find out where he would end up next. I don't think that being trapped inside a mother's womb or being expelled as feces would be a very good experience but I liked the drastic vastness of this concept. He could be anything from a drop of tear to a foetus inside a womb to a single particle of matter. It is extremely intriguing.
Your word choice was absolutely brilliant. I loved the way you described each experience so uniquely with sentences crafted with much care and precision. Your use of certain words painted a really vivid picture and I can just tell that you will be brilliant in descriptions.
The one place I had trouble understanding was the ending. You made it sound like he became a tiny particle of matter spinning into infinty until finally he faded away into the great nothingness of the universe. Does that mean he no longer exists? He needs access to the time globe in order to hop across time and change into something else again and he can't do that anymore. On one hand, I like how the ending is open to interpretation. And on the other hand, I wish it was a little more clearer.
Overall, this was a really great piece that can have so many meanings.
Keep writing and have a great day!
Oh and, Happy RevMo!
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