Young Writers Society

This is truly a fantastic poem.
You have captured all dimensions of a toxic relationship fantastically here. I love the use of your language and imagery - it really allows you to visualise how deep and scarring that a situation like that can be, and how the victim is lured into lies, thinking that they're in love. My favourite stanza is the last one, "heart hollow as her dream flickers and dies", as you really hammer home the emotional impact that thinking that someone loves you who doesn't, can have upon someones heart, and how them waiting, will just cause the scarring to get deeper and deeper.
Keep writing
Sunlightwarriorxo

This poem really conveys most elements of a toxic relationship( I haven't been in one, but I can recognize it)...I really appreciate how you have maintained a single rhyming scheme throughout the poem and rhymed with only 1 word.......the title itself is catchy........Even though I haven't been in a relationship, you made me imagine this, and a true poem is the one which makes you wonder......your vocabulary is excellent........and again, as I said, it I'd difficult to find so many rhyming words with one word.........my favorite lines were
"Desperately willing for his live to arise"
"Shattered souls seen shut with venomous vines" (nice alliteration btw)
"She bears blows while her skin's mottled with signs"( another alliteration)
"Her self esteem incessantly declines"

Congratulations for this amazing poem

First of all great poem Queenie.
The poem clearly brings to limelight the struggles of a toxic relationship in which you are the only one willing to keep things working and giving all the love of the world while getting none in return.
I would rather jump to the interpretation part, which I believe you referred to in your description.
The context of the poem kind of stands out for me as the relationship we humans share with religion. We start believing in it with the hope of being deliver from the clutches of evil , never realizing that its actually the one opening the gates to it. What lies ahead is a sea filled with ignorance, false hopes , and discrimination and the mighty waves of religious leaders who are going to wipe away all the sanity of our mind while they splash with their all their vigor on our human minds turning us into zombies crying out for help to someone imaginary and believing that we ourselves are incapable of achieving unimaginable feats.

However really great choice of words. Heard them echoing within me while reading your poem( although I have never really been in a romantic relationship).

I know this is not really a review but am gonna make it look as one for some points.#honesty


Lots of love,
Crazystar

A sad poem with a sinister background. You don't really have to read between the lines to see how much someone struggles for love and at the same time gets hurt the closer one gets. You can clearly see how the person is playing with the other and just taking advantage of them.

You have a very good way with words. The title is also very appropriate. It is very difficult to get out of such a relationship.

Hello there!
I haven't read many of your works yet, but I love your word choice!

You paint a vivid picture and draw me into this fairytale world, but there's obviously a dark side to your writing:

hypnotized by his toxic lullabies

shattered soul sewn shut with venomous vines

lured into his labyrinth of lies

she dreads a life of solitude designs

desperately willing his love to arise