Hello! Wallflower here with a quick review
This poem is lovely! The imagery throughout the whole thing serves to bring the reader to the scene you describe, and the parallels and metaphors between other aspects of our world serves to create a universal feel in which everyone can take part.
The transition between the beginning, setting the scene, and the ending, the query of the fleeting nature of everything is so smooth and wonderfully done. Truly, this poem tells a story of human pondering and our sudden awareness of the nature of everything.
Overall, it's absolutely fantastic!! Your pacing and diction are lovely, and the concepts explored are vast, yet you've managed to fit them into a relatively short poem. Fantastic job!!
Points: 390
Reviews: 103
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