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The Lost Dragon 25.2

by soundofmind


Chapter 25.2: A Man and His Horse (Also Bo is there Too, Just Watching)

The stables were underground. James didn't even have to ask to go to them - Bo was already leading him there in silence. James had to take two and a half steps for each one Bo took as he walked ahead of him, leading him through a series of stone halls, all of which resembled one another.

If it wasn't for the lack of windows, and the cool, stale air, James might not have believed they were underground though. The interior, though clearly stone, looked like it could be a part of any normal building. Even the lanterns lining the walls were familiar, like those in the depths of the palace, lit up when it was night. It made it feel like it was nighttime, even though he didn't know what time of day it was. All he knew was that two weeks had passed, and he remembered none of it.

As they walked in silence, James tried to remember the turns they were taking to get there. He noted the doors they passed - most of them were wood, but they still looked heavy. He tried to keep in mind that Mickey had said they were in a guild. A guild full of people.

As far as the world knew, and as far as he knew, up until this point, mage guilds didn't exist anymore. What actually existed above-ground was the very antithesis of mage-guilds; guilds for mage hunters. People who tracked down and killed mages before they could ever get powerful enough to fight back.

Mage hunters were always lauded as heroes who protected "normal" humankind, but James had learned over time that they were no heroes. They were murderers and praised for it.

He couldn't help but think of Clandestine, and how happy she would be to be in a place like this. To be with other people who did magic. People who were so eager to welcome her in like family, and were already calling her their own without even knowing her. He hadn't met many mages who revealed themselves to be so, but he wondered if Bo and others had found them, or vice versa, and if they were here too.

But that would have to wait for later.

There was so much itching at the back of his mind.

He needed to see Elliot was okay. He needed to see Billy was okay. He needed to know Clandestine was okay, and that was the one he was the least assured about. He wanted to believe she was alive and saveable, but he couldn't help but consider the possibility of her already being dead.

Like Bo said. It had been two weeks.

The hall turned and widened, and at the end of it, there were two double doors. Before Bo announced it, James could smell it. The smell of a barn. Hay. Feed. Manure.

Bo let James go first to the door, and James's hand paused briefly on the handle. It was something that James could never really shake - someone, a stranger, even a kind one like Bo, standing behind him. It was vulnerable. But Bo didn't do anything.

James opened the door. Inside, there was an open space, and the floor was dirt, littered with hay. On the left wall was a long row of stalls. Most of them were occupied.

James started walking.

"He's in--" Bo started, but didn't finish. James had already spotted him, and he ran.

Fifth stall, and Elliot saw him approaching. Elliot poked his head out over the divider and whinnied, nodding his head in excitement and James came and wrapped his arms around Elliot's neck. At that moment, he'd forgotten anyone was watching.

He hugged Elliot firmly and dug his face into Elliot's mane, and Elliot rested his face over James's shoulder. He could feel Elliot beginning to relax into the embrace, and James had his eyes pinned shut. Relief rushed through him, even though he knew it wasn't over.

He heard a nicker from the next stall over. He pulled away from Elliot and looked over to see Billy sticking his head out, stretching to reach him. James went to him and hugged him too. But when he pulled away, he could tell that it wasn't the same. James wasn't Billy's person in the same way that James was Elliot's.

He stroked the side of Billy's face and brushed the black horse's white star with his thumb.

"I'll find her for you," he whispered.

It was as much a promise to the horse as it was to himself. For Clandestine.

He could feel Bo's towering shadow approaching from behind. It was difficult to miss.

"They're happy to see you," Bo said softly.

James glanced back at him, but kept looking at Elliot and Billy. He was standing between their stalls now, with both of them reaching towards him, vying for his attention. He petted both of their snouts.

"Thank you for taking care of them," he said lowly. "And making sure they were safe."

Bo was quiet for a moment. "I'm sorry we failed to do the same for Clandestine."

James swallowed, and looked back at him.

"It's... it wasn't your fault. If anything, it's mine. Carter finally found me, and I must have led him right to her."

"Do you have any idea what he wants with her?"

James looked down at the barn floor, and his eyebrows furrowed together. "I... I'm not sure. I thought she was just a regular mage. If she was, he would've just as quickly killed her too."

He paused, reconsidering what he knew. Or thought he knew. "And I - well, I thought I was wanted alive. But I guess I'm not anymore. Which means that he found what--"

James blinked. No. It couldn't be.

Bo was staring at him with his eyebrows raised in expectation. "He found... what?"

"Clandestine can't be a dragon," James whispered. "That doesn't make any sense."

Bo continued to watch him. Elliot nuzzled James's hand and arm. James started petting him without thinking, still staring at the ground.

"James, how much do you know about dragons?" Bo asked.

James blinked. "I--" his eyes narrowed. "Only really as much as Mickey told me. And that was years ago. I don't know if I remembered all of it."

Bo let out a sigh. "Well, at least you got reliable information from the source."

James blinked again. "The what?"

Bo put his hands in his pockets, and leaned back on his heels. He smiled to one side with his eyebrows arching upward and he shrugged.

"Not sure if you want another big piece of uh, news dropped on you right now," Bo said.

James frowned. "I'm not a child. Tell me."

"Didn't say you were, it's just that, well, you literally woke up from almost being dead only like, an hour ago? I get not wanting to take it slow, but--"

"Just tell me," James demanded.

Bo's mouth spread into a tight straight line, and his shrug dropped as he sighed. "Okay. Just, don't freak out on me, okay?"

James glared at him.

"Okay, okay." Bo put his hands up defensively before setting them back in his pockets. "Mickey is a dragon."

James's eyes widened.

"And while we're at it, I'm also... somewhat a dragon. You probably don't know about inheritors. Basically, we're like, well, the name is pretty straightforward. We're in line to inherit the dragon's magic when the dragon dies. Don't ask me why me, trust me, I ask myself every day. It's just some luck or not-luck of the draw in some magical genetic lottery, so--"

James stuttered until words came out. "A dragon. As in, a real, actual dragon. That's been around since the actual conception of the world dragon?"

"Well, it's a little more complicated than that--"

"But Mickey is an actual dragon?"

"Yes, he is. The dragon of earth. Plant life. Dirt. Rocks. All that."

James narrowed his eyes again at him. Mickey. The man who lived in the forest and just happened to shelter him from a blizzard had been a dragon. And he had been shocked to learn that Mickey was a mage at the time.

"It might be helpful to know that Clandestine is probably an inheritor too," Bo said, continuing even as James's head was beginning to spin. "Basically what that means is she has like, a baby amount of dragon magic imparted to her from birth, but she isn't a fully realized dragon yet. That won't happen until she meets the real fire dragon, Svida--"

James put his hand up.

"Okay, you can stop now."

"I told you it was a lot."

James shot another glare. Dragons. Inheritors. All things he'd stopped thinking about a long time ago - though the latter was news to him. He couldn't blame Bo for not knowing. Not knowing how intimately tied dragons were - almost ironically now - to how quickly his life had fallen apart five years ago. But apparently things went further back than that, if Mickey was a dragon.

"Yeah," he muttered. "I know."


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Hey there sound! I never did finish reading or reviewing this, for which I apologize! At this point, I'm not sure if you're even looking for more feedback on this piece. BUT if you are, I would be more than will to finish reading and reviewing this wonderful novel <3

It's been awhile since I read any of this, but I believe that, uhh, we just met Bo and things are starting to progress!! Hopefully this chapter will jog my memory ^^

James had to take two and a half steps for each one Bo took


Bo is big boy

They were murderers and praised for it.


This is heavy stuff. Most heroes we see in real life and in media are just the side of the story that enough people supported. Good and bad aren't really a clear cut thing.

There was so much itching at the back of his mind.


Emotions: :eyes:
James: WHATS THIS ITCHING IN THE BACK OF MY MIND??? MAKE IT STOP

I'm happy to see James genuinely happy to see Elliot. He's never really had friends or people he cared for. It's nice to see that he still has something he cares about and is willing to admit that.

"Clandestine can't be a dragon," James whispered. "That doesn't make any sense."


Okay, I'm wondering where that came from. Maybe it's because it's been months since I read the previous parts, but I did not realize James even thought about a dragon or that Clandestine could be a dragon. For me, it was out of nowhere.

We're in line to inherit the dragon's magic when the dragon dies. Don't ask me why me, trust me, I ask myself every day. It's just some luck or not-luck of the draw in some magical genetic lottery, so--"


I SWEAR if Clandestine dies at the end of this and James is her inheritor, I will be SO SAD. It just came to mind that I've never seen you rp with Clandestine. IS THIS WHY noooooo that's so sad please Clanny make it out of this novel alive!

"It might be helpful to know that Clandestine is probably an inheritor too," Bo said, continuing even as James's head was beginning to spin. "Basically what that means is she has like, a baby amount of dragon magic imparted to her from birth, but she isn't a fully realized dragon yet. That won't happen until she meets the real fire dragon, Svida--"


Okay, this puts my mind to rest a little bit. wait, unless CLANNY IS TAKEN TO SVIDA nooo and then she becomes a dragon and Carter is like MAKE ME YOUR INHERITOR and then kills her but she makes James her inheritor and he's left with the guilt of what happens to her. NOOOOO is this actually what's gonna happen?! oh gosh SOUND first of all if this is what's gonna happen, bravo that's definitely a finale, but also SOUND Clanny dying would be... pain.

okay, wow I guess I'm back into this XD wow about that whole seeing if this chapter brings me back into the fold i guess we dont have to worry about THAT. I can't wait to read more and hopefully THIS TIME I'll finish reading it and get to that darned finale.




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Bo is big boy

yes

I'm happy to see James genuinely happy to see Elliot.

thank u yes he loves his horsie

Maybe it's because it's been months since I read the previous parts, but I did not realize James even thought about a dragon or that Clandestine could be a dragon.

lol honestly I forget how exactly I led up to this in previous chapters but I swear it's been hinted at I just have poo brain

It just came to mind that I've never seen you rp with Clandestine. IS THIS WHY

THAT'S NOT WHY!! It's actually cuz Clandestine is an adopted character from @sherlockhson and not my OG so, while I've written her in this, it kinda feels wrong to go off an rp with her like she's mine

SOUND Clanny dying would be... pain.

i agree yes

ALSO I'M GLAD U GOT EXCITED READING AND I don't know if I'm looking to make any immediate changes because I'm still just tryna think about Book 2 and getting off my butt to write it so I can finish the story I vaguely have in mind
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I love u and if u want to read it and enjoy it :) pleas go ahead!! if u want to review go off but I put no pressure!!!!



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this are moving fast now I AM LEARNINGGG

also low key high key knew Bo was going to be connected to dragons somehow cuz of that shirtless drawing u did with his tattoos LOOOOL

wat are these comments i am sorry for anyone else reading these




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HELLO! I know this has been rescued from the Green Room already but it feels INCOMPLETE to jump to the next bit without reviewing these next two too so LET'S GO.

A Man and His Horse (Also Bo is there Too, Just Watching)


This looks like it could be the title to another kind of entertainment too *eyes*

James didn't even have to ask to go to them - Bo was already leading him there in silence.


Okay but at the end of the last bit he straight-up demanded to know where his horse was so he kinda did??

The smell of a barn. Hay. Feed. Manure.


*shocked Pikachu* Who could have ever expected a stable to smell like a barn.

James glanced back at him, but kept looking at Elliot and Billy.


These are directly contradictory actions xD

"Thank you for taking care of them," he said lowly. "And making sure they were safe."


Okay but "lowly" means "humbly" not "softly" lol

"Okay, you can stop now."


Ahaha, he DID warn you, James.

~ ~ ~

Okay, sorry that this review consisted entirely of sarcasm xD This was a good chapter! I liked it! The pace feels maybe a little rushed cause you drop a LOT of info here in a very short period of time and it almost feels nonchalant, like, "oh, yeah, and here's a massive plot point we'll casually talk about while I'm petting a horse"

But I still liked it! It was nice info to get as I'm trying to get into the swing of this novel and as always your characters are adorable and likeable and I like how we get a Soft Boi moment when he sees his horse.

Hope this helped!

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this chapter is VERY infodumpy yes bless u for reading and love u for your review and ur sass i have mush brain but I wanted to say thank u yes <3



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Hey there Sound. I see that you have a lot of these chapters in the green room and I've read parts of this novel before, so I thought I should probably drop by. I can't exactly remember where I had read to before but hopefully I can catch up??? Or just guess???

There is certainly a lot going on in this chapter. It starts off with the concept of having a stable underground/in the basement of some other place and made me think of the Ministry in the Harry Potter universe. Where you're clearly underground but it doesn't feel underground based on whatever magic is present at that point in time.

There's also a lot of heavy emotions going on in this chapter from James being a soft boy with his horse to James being absolutely heartbroken about the missing member of his team. I do remember reading some earlier chapters where he and Clandestine were rescuing a griffin (?) and egg from some deep dark hole. For some reason I remember that it was for illicit purposes.

I feel like this was almost a compulsory chapter to explain the concept of your title and perhaps it's the application of your magic system. I was getting a bit mixed up in your magic system? I'm sure it's something that you have explained at other points in time to your regular readers. To me though it has some elements that remind me of the BBC Merlin tv series of the 2010s when we come to the idea of dragon magic.

It's clear that James, as a character, is feeling betrayed by certain structures of the magical system. Which is rightly placed because he has been left out of the loop but his emotional reaction here does seem to be a bit lacking to me. It's so strong when he finds his horse again but now he finds out that his missing friend has this elusive dragon magic, and he's just kinda like "shrug". That's something that felt out of place for me.

I don't have too many other comments at this time because I'm just trying to adjust back to this story. I think you're doing a good job so far but there are a few points where I can tell you need to flesh the details out. There is a bit of confusion that arises for me that I'm hoping will be relieved as I move forward in reading more parts of this story.

Hope you have a good day!
- Jack




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Ahhh I appreciate your commentary especially after returning to the story after a while! I'm sorry it was confusing to jump back into but I do hope things make more sense if you're able to keep reading! THANK YOUUUU FOR YOUR REVIEW!!!



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Hey there! I think I might review your story slightly more often. I’m always doing at least one part a day, but every once in a while I might try for a second as well (because of the reviewing challenge and all!).

The stables were underground. James didn't even have to ask to go to them - Bo was already leading him there in silence. James had to take two and a half steps for each one Bo took as he walked ahead of him, leading him through a series of stone halls, all of which resembled one another.

If it wasn't for the lack of windows, and the cool, stale air, James might not have believed they were underground though. The interior, though clearly stone, looked like it could be a part of any normal building. Even the lanterns lining the walls were familiar, like those in the depths of the palace, lit up when it was night. It made it feel like it was nighttime, even though he didn't know what time of day it was. All he knew was that two weeks had passed, and he remembered none of it.


I’ve never thought of what an underground stable might be like. Hopefully they have a good way of getting the horses to the surface, like a ramp or something, because stairs might be hard! But I like the added detail about how Bo’s steps are much larger than James’. Also, it seems like James has spent at least some time in the palace for whatever reason, if he’s comparing the hallway lanterns to the ones there. Interesting!

As they walked in silence, James tried to remember the turns they were taking to get there. He noted the doors they passed - most of them were wood, but they still looked heavy. He tried to keep in mind that Mickey had said they were in a guild. A guild full of people.


I found myself wondering about why exactly he’s counting the turns and committing the layout of the place to memory. It could be that he does it instinctively and automatically, or that he wants to know how to escape if he needs to make a run for it. Both seem like reasons that he’d do it for.

Mage hunters were always lauded as heroes who protected "normal" humankind, but James had learned over time that they were no heroes. They were murderers and praised for it.


I hope we get to see why he started to think for himself eventually! We’ve seen that most non-mages have a hatred for magic that has been placed in them from a young age, so it probably happened to James too. It’ll be exciting when we find out what changed his mind about them. c:

Fifth stall, and Elliot saw him approaching. Elliot poked his head out over the divider and whinnied, nodding his head in excitement and James came and wrapped his arms around Elliot's neck. At that moment, he'd forgotten anyone was watching.

He hugged Elliot firmly and dug his face into Elliot's mane, and Elliot rested his face over James's shoulder. He could feel Elliot beginning to relax into the embrace, and James had his eyes pinned shut. Relief rushed through him, even though he knew it wasn't over.


Yesssssss, happy reunion with horse. Mostly happy reunion, I mean. Somewhat happy. Okay, ignoring the fact that Clandestine’s in trouble and we don’t know what’s happened to her, it’s as happy as we can get! (Also, that’s a well chosen title for this part.)

"Thank you for taking care of them," he said lowly. "And making sure they were safe."

Bo was quiet for a moment. "I'm sorry we failed to do the same for Clandestine."

James swallowed, and looked back at him.

"It's... it wasn't your fault. If anything, it's mine. Carter finally found me, and I must have led him right to her."


Uh oh, this is a self-blame fest now ;-;

Did you mean “slowly” instead of “lowly” in the first part? Technically both adverbs can work, though one of them seems more fitting to me.

James looked down at the barn floor, and his eyebrows furrowed together. "I... I'm not sure. I thought she was just a regular mage. If she was, he would've just as quickly killed her too."

He paused, reconsidering what he knew. Or thought he knew. "And I - well, I thought I was wanted alive. But I guess I'm not anymore. Which means that he found what--"
James blinked. No. It couldn't be.

Bo was staring at him with his eyebrows raised in expectation. "He found... what?"

"Clandestine can't be a dragon," James whispered. "That doesn't make any sense."


So Clandestine is considered more valuable and important now… Welp, James, people probably think you’re dead. That’s good if your enemies think that, but Clandestine’s definitely worried about you now. Both of them are so worried about the other right now and it’s sad! :c

"James, how much do you know about dragons?" Bo asked.

James blinked. "I--" his eyes narrowed. "Only really as much as Mickey told me. And that was years ago. I don't know if I remembered all of it."

Bo let out a sigh. "Well, at least you got reliable information from the source."

Bo's mouth spread into a tight straight line, and his shrug dropped as he sighed. "Okay. Just, don't freak out on me, okay?"

James glared at him.

"Okay, okay." Bo put his hands up defensively before setting them back in his pockets. "Mickey is a dragon."


We knew already, but now it’s time to watch James freak out!

"And while we're at it, I'm also... somewhat a dragon. You probably don't know about inheritors. Basically, we're like, well, the name is pretty straightforward. We're in line to inherit the dragon's magic when the dragon dies. Don't ask me why me, trust me, I ask myself every day. It's just some luck or not-luck of the draw in some magical genetic lottery, so--"

James stuttered until words came out. "A dragon. As in, a real, actual dragon. That's been around since the actual conception of the world dragon?"

"Well, it's a little more complicated than that--"

"But Mickey is an actual dragon?"

"Yes, he is. The dragon of earth. Plant life. Dirt. Rocks. All that."


But that I didn’t know. I really love this concept! The idea of an established dragon “heir” that could be anyone in the world is really cool, and it’s also an awesome reveal to have up your sleeve. c:

”It might be helpful to know that Clandestine is probably an inheritor too," Bo said, continuing even as James's head was beginning to spin. "Basically what that means is she has like, a baby amount of dragon magic imparted to her from birth, but she isn't a fully realized dragon yet. That won't happen until she meets the real fire dragon, Svida--"


*GASP* IT MAKES SENSE

But really, it does! She has magic different than other fire mages, but she doesn’t seem to be a dragon herself— it’s brilliant! It was really clever to give us evidence that she was a dragon, and it turns out to look like it’s something just a little different. The title of the book might be making more sense here!

James put his hand up.

"Okay, you can stop now."

"I told you it was a lot."

James shot another glare. Dragons. Inheritors. All things he'd stopped thinking about a long time ago - though the latter was news to him. He couldn't blame Bo for not knowing. Not knowing how intimately tied dragons were - almost ironically now - to how quickly his life had fallen apart five years ago. But apparently things went further back than that, if Mickey was a dragon.

"Yeah," he muttered. "I know."


But James was not prepared for this. rip cx

I wonder if whatever dragon-related event James experienced caused him to have some grudge against them… He doesn’t seem too pleased about Mickey being one, and that it’s a bit deeper than shock at the ones. I’m excited to see where this goes!

I’ll be back tomorrow for the next chapter. Hope you’re doing well! <3





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