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Fake

by SparkySweet


I wrote this song a year ago about a former friend who cut me off for no apparent reason. It's of course dramatized for the song to work better, but it was a tough time either way, and writing about it helped me through.

[VERSE 1]

You’re smiling one minute, scowling the next

Saying that we’re cool but you won’t shoot me a text

Swear that we’re pals but talk behind my back

Common friendly decency is where you lack

Now come on

How am I to know what went wrong

When all you do is shrug and wave me off

[CHORUS]

You’re so fake

Stop pretending that you’re sweet when I know what’s underneath

You’re so fake

Acting all innocent when I know you’re far from magnificent

You’re so fake

Why even bother with theatrics when I clearly know

You’re so fake

And I believed it for a while, but now it’s time to end the show

‘Cause now I know

[VERSE 2]

I thought maybe it was something that I did

I’ve tried to hash it out, while you keep acting like a kid

I thought we could’ve been the best of friends

But now I see you don’t care to make amends

And I’ve tried to see things from where you are

But which face do I look through when you’re a two-faced liar

Your act can only get you so far

Discard the true friends and latch onto ones that are subpar

[CHORUS]

You’re so fake

Stop pretending that you’re true, when I know it’s all a ruse

You’re so fake

Acting like someone to confide in when I know you’ll spread all lies, friend

You’re so fake

Why even bother with the act when I know for sure the fact is

You’re so fake

And I believed it for a while, but now it’s time to end the show

‘Cause now I know

[BRIDGE]

You’re so fake

Why did I ever stand for any of your games

I hope you feel better now after leaving a dent in my name

I’ll admit that you put on quite the charade

However, there’s only so much you can masquerade

In the end what you don’t know

Is that someday people will see the true you show

[CHORUS]

You’re so fake

Stop pretending that you’re sweet when I know what’s underneath

You’re so fake

Acting all innocent when I know you’re far from magnificent

You’re so fake

Why even bother with theatrics when I clearly know

You’re so fake

And I believed it for a while, but now it’s time to end the show

‘Cause now I know

All you are is a fake


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Sun Aug 02, 2020 7:29 pm
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Hey SparkySweet!

Here's some feedback on your song. :)

Overall there weren't any issues that broke up your song or made it sound choppy. While reading it I tried to imagine what it sounded like and it flowed pretty nicely!

Your use of words and the emotions were very powerful. The bridge really shows how hurt/mad you are about the situation and that you're finally fed up with everything that a person did. Even if it was just dramatized it was all very well put together.

I hope you keep up the good work and keep writing. Also, it would be amazing if you composed some music/vocals to go along with this. I'm sure it would be a wonderful piece.

Have a great day!




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Hey there, @SparkySweet!

I'm here to give you my few words on your song :)
First of all- I really liked it. I know you've mentioned you've dramatized it a bit, but it worked out pretty well here, especially since it's planned to be a song.
I'm a HUGE grunge fan, so while I was reading it, I was humming Bruise Violet- I don't know if that's the genre you had in mind while writing, but for me it's something in that sense.

"Common friendly decency is where you lack" -
my favorite line, by the way.

Awesome, thank you for that one!

I wish I could hear the way in sounds <3




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Hey @SparkySweet!
VioletFantasy here to give you a review. I really like these song lyrics! They are so catchy and I even caught myself making up a fake tune to sing in my head while I was reading them. You get your point across without repeating yourself too much. It has the perfect balance between new verses and choruses.

“ But which face do I look through when you’re a two-faced liar

Your act can only get you so far

Discard the true friends and latch onto ones that are subpar”

This was definitely my favorite part, especially the first line. It is so clever(and reminded me of Professor Quirrell when he had Voldemort’s face on the back of his head 🤣. By the way happy birthday Harry!)!! Anyway, the part about this toxic friend needing to find friends who aren’t as wonderfully amazing as you is also very powerful. The joke is on her! You deserve better.

After rereading the lyrics several times, I only found one itsy bitsy thing that I would change. In this line, “ Common friendly decency is where you lack”, maybe try changing the word “where” to “what”. I think it flows a little bit better. Other than that, your lyrics are absolutely fantabulous!





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