Hello! Here to review your work!
I love that is is a short story, which actually made me want to read it more. How it started off was amazing because everyone can relate to at one point not loving themselves and it really drags everyone in. This story works with many people, with so many situations. You really did great with that.
People struggle every day with not loving themselves. People don't like the shape of their body, or face, or hair type. It is such a problem because everyone is amazing in every way just people don't believe that. I don't understand, I mean everyone is different why can't people just focus on that. The difference is amazing it is so cool that we all like different things, enjoy different things, and are just plain old different.
Something in your short story that really got me was this-
"Randy looked at his reflection and yelled: why are you this way? Why do you lack all intuition, kindness, and intelligence? Why are you such a limping, disgusting, blubbering, pathetic sack of shit? Why? I hate you so much!" he screamed at his reflection, "why are you so goddamn lame?" His reflection smirked and whispered, "to you.""
It had so much emotion, so much anger and pain in it. It's sad but so true. Great job! I will be reading more of your work! Please keep writing!
_ From your friend,
@PlainandSimple
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