**My Thoughts**
Hey @lizapieza! LZ here with a review! I liked this little story. Well, I guess it isn't a story, I'll just call it a paragraph from here on out. Your choice of words is amazing and makes the piece sound professional.
**Formatting and Grammar**
I liked how simply formatted this poem is. It is very neat and is easy to read. I think you could move the first sentence into the paragraph, it doesn't do much difference if it's separate. If you wanted to take it a step further, you could indent the paragraph, but it looks great as it is.
As for grammar, this paragraph is wonderful! I mentioned it before, but your wording is great! A few of my favorites:
my passion, dissipate into nothing
curling and shriveling
monolithic and commanding
**Punctuation and Capitalization**
Your punctuation was perfect! I really appreciate that. It's nice to read and review a piece that you can read smoothly and know where to stop.
Capitalization was great! As I previously mentioned, the paragraph flowed smoothly with the help of full punctuation and capitalization!
**Quick Review**
Great work! I loved your wording and how everything was correct!
Keep on writing, you are spectacular! Have a good rest of February!
Points: 1992
Reviews: 142
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