Goodness that was quite a plot twist at the end! I really like it, it was so short and clean. The 100 word limit is tough, but you created something lovely out of it. My only critique is that you could use more comas. Like when you said scrub scrub scrub. Use commas. Scrub, scrub, scrub the floor. Otherwise it was perfect!
Points: 1992
Reviews: 142
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